Young Writers Society

This has been in the green room two days too long in my opinion, and there's no way I couldn't leave a review on this after reading. Here's another stranger's face, analyzing your words

Your use of metaphor in this piece is stellar. The language choices communicate the ideas and themes of the piece wonderfully. Very abstract concepts are being described, but the way you tie those concepts to various visuals helps to convey how the narrator feels about these topics. My favorite metaphor is the rug being pulled out from under the narrator in the second to last stanza.

This work is completely freeform, but it still maintains a sense of meter and flow. The way some short lines are repeated with variation is wonderful. It's also impressive how you maintained rythm through the variation in line lengths.

I absolutely loved reading this. Keep writing!

-Blueca

Hi, BrokenHeartsAri here for a short review!


So I would like to say hi, I hope you are doing well today.



I love the nice flow of this poem so I send kudos for that



This poem was really good I liked it so much.
It had such a nice strong impact on words.



My favorite part was most likely was

"I have the ability

to fly

And land softly

On a make-shift world

cast upon by the token of my dreams "

I really did like this part it stuck with me.


you did an amazing job with this poem, I love your word choice I love how you started it off I love how you ended it too. You did a great job!



Keep up the great work-BrokenHeartsAri

I love the nice flow of this good job. I feel it's nice and smooth and it works well. The feeling of the poem is strong within me and will stick for a while