Young Writers Society

Hey, illy! Welcome to the community of YWS, and thank you for submitting your poetry to the sit to be reviewed. I hope you're having a great time, I know it can be a bit daunting to get around at first, so lemme know if you need any help!

First off, I would recommend a TW (abbreviation for "trigger warning") at the start of your poem as some words, such as "rape," or certain sentences or phases (such as when you mention abuse) can affect the reader(s) negatively on the mental or emotional level. Just a though! ^^

You seem to go back and forth as to whether or not punctuation is used or not; it would be better for the poem and its structure if you went back and either added all the appropriate commas, periods, etc or to take them out completely. I personally prefer having full punctuation as opposed to none, but it's a personal preference :P


I hope you have a nice [*insert time of day here*]!!!

Wow just wow this was fantastic! in just a few words you had me moved this was fantastic you really show emotion and the way everything is said is just so very perfect. I don't know if i'm reading this wrong but I feel as if it mother nature talking about the human race and I think you presented her beautifully the way she wants to help but can only do so much is fantastic. just over all I think you did a great job and I applaud your writing skills! Any way I hope you have a fantastic day bye! .