Young Writers Society

Good poem.

Hi.... The pages here . Lovely poem, couldn't help but smile at the following verse as it almost points to me....nice
"I am one of the confident ones

Though sometimes I shy away at the mirror

And sighs in disappointment

But then I flash a dazzling smile

Sure to steal the hearts of many

And look into my eyes

And realise I'm kind

Gracious

Wise"

Hi!
Wow, this surely is a great poem you have here, I love the language and imagery that you've used - you really explore emotional dimensions of what it feels like to be a human being, so well done. My only suggestion for an edit would be with your last five lines:

Wise,

I can never escape the feeling inside,

I'm torn in two,

Smiling once before,

Now look at what they've done,

And though I envy those who can afford five bedroom houses,

The flashy cars, the dinners out,

The two cars or that trampoline,

I would never replace my life to be seen,

Because that would involve replacing me.

Now these are all just suggested edits of course - your work, you do whatever you feel as though works best for you, but aside from that, it's a brilliant poem - well done, you should proud!