I am the fed one
Though sometimes my fridge is empty
I am the dreamer
Who looks at the ground
I am the thinker
Who has emptiness inside
I am the loved and the loving
But still is pained by hurtful memories
I am the innocent
But my mistakes still haunt me
I am the livelier
Who can find it hard to live
I am the giver
With nothing to give
I am the spoilt
Who can't always have nice things
I've never been fed buy a garbage bin
Or slept on a bench
Or had an empty stomach
But still sometimes I have to eat
Tinned cans of tuna and sardines
I am one of the confident ones
Though sometimes I shy away at the mirror
And sighs in disappointment
But then I flash a dazzling smile
Sure to steal the hearts of many
And look into my eyes
And realise I'm kind
Gracious
Wise
And though I envy those who can afford 5 bedroom houses
2 cars
And a trampoline
I would never replace my life for any
Because that would involve replacing me
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Good poem.
Thank you so much
Hi.... The pages here . Lovely poem, couldn't help but smile at the following verse as it almost points to me....nice
"I am one of the confident ones
Though sometimes I shy away at the mirror
And sighs in disappointment
But then I flash a dazzling smile
Sure to steal the hearts of many
And look into my eyes
And realise I'm kind
Gracious
Wise"
Thank you so much, I'm glad that my poem is relatable and I'm glad that others feel the same way I do, it really makes me feel good that I made somebody smile
That's the beauty and essence of it all, writing .... Make someone lost in emotion... An escape route from the unfathomable scoffs of life.
That's so poetic, you should definitely write that down. I agree, getting these things down is a release, and what you feel suddenly matters, it means something and is relevant.
Hi!
Wow, this surely is a great poem you have here, I love the language and imagery that you've used - you really explore emotional dimensions of what it feels like to be a human being, so well done. My only suggestion for an edit would be with your last five lines:
Wise,
I can never escape the feeling inside,
I'm torn in two,
Smiling once before,
Now look at what they've done,
And though I envy those who can afford five bedroom houses,
The flashy cars, the dinners out,
The two cars or that trampoline,
I would never replace my life to be seen,
Because that would involve replacing me.
Now these are all just suggested edits of course - your work, you do whatever you feel as though works best for you, but aside from that, it's a brilliant poem - well done, you should proud!
Thank you so much