The refreshing tweets and chirps
Obtrusive glare from the sun
Invariably lighting the way
The siege of new light
The feud of a crisis
The dawn of new inspiration
The stranded thought of contemplation
My ideas weaved together to create creation
As I arose from slumber
For when there is darkness, there is light
That may provoke evil voices
And though this is confinement
Current home is a sanctuary
Our pain now is silence
Muffled by mother nature's wails
And though our faces covered
And end a sought relief
And if the apocolypse finishes
Masks may still hide identities
Confidence may still waver
But I pledge to align...
Dear world
You trust me on this
I vow to change society
By a poem of heartache
Or a thousand word speech
I promise to help those who need
And though we do not
See stars at night
As clearly as daylight
But drifting, lonely clouds
We are reassured by warm, grazing glows of bedroom lights
And may our relentless boredom
Be objected by fruitful occupations
Of kindness and compassion
To reunite in toughest times
And auger light in darkness
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What a poignant and beautifully crafted poem - your language and imagery have captured the feeling of 2020, now including early 2021 really well. Your writing shows a high amount of relatibility which I think is fantastic seeing as we all continue to endure lockdown and the challenges it brings - you should share this work as much as you can! My favourite part of the poem are your last eight lines, you really embody the common feeling right now, and how filling our time, can be done by good things.
Honestly, I have no improvements for suggestions. It's a great poem, and you're an extremely talented writer, so please keep writing!
Thank you so much that's so sweet
Thank you so much that's so sweet
Wow! Wonderful poem! It is a complete package with many intricate details, and your words have the potential to arouse allot of hope in the readers. I really liked your use of vocabulary. I have seen many poems on the year 2020, I have written one too, but this one is very different and unique, I felt. It doesn't particularly talk about the pandemic and its consequences, but how to cope with then, which I appreciate. I loved how you used alliteration in "create creation", and also it is a very unique way of putting what you mean. My favourite phrases :
"The siege of new light"
"The feud of a crisis"
"Muffled by Mother nature's wails"
"My ideas weaved together to create creation"
Although I feel you could have used punctuation a little more. Overall, LOVED IT!
Thank you so much for your review
Hello Illy7896,
Just here to say that this poem was lovely ^-^ I hope you are doing well in these hard times <3
Thank you so much, I hope you are too
this is awesome. i think you wrote this poem just after waking from sleep( although I might be wrong. please consider then)
My ideas weaved together to create creation
i think this line should be - my ideas weaved together to create the creation. it sounds better. what do you think?
And if the apocolypse finishes
I think it should be - And if the apocalypse finishes.
There is a spelling mistake. Apart from these, I have nothing more complaints.
Overall, it's very good. It reflects the rising of a new hope. I liked it. These are mere reviews. If you want to take the suggeztion you take, if you don't like, don't take. I hope I havd helped you through this review. Thanks
Thank you so much for your review