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Wow! This was great Snazzy I loved the way this poem flowed. The title was also eye-catching. I almost want to go back and read all your poems. Here take two thumbs up. I really cant say anything negative about it. Keep up the good work. Keep writing and never get discouraged!

~Keepwriting

Pst. Ain't isn't a word. Hehehe

This is such a wonderful poem! Great job Snazz Pizazz!

Hiiiii! It's Kaila here for a review.

"That's what I do"

Okay first let me say that I'm not totally sure if this is a silly poem or a deep poem about jumping off a cliff because everyone else is doing it. I kind of get the vibe that it's silly, though, but correct me if I'm wrong.

I love the simplicity of this poem. I even think that you could take out a couple lines just to add more focus to the lines that are your favorite. I've become a strong believer that less is more in writing, especially poetry.

I do have a couple of minor comments, but I did overall like this poem

First of all, it think the phrase "Cause they aren't," is funny because the slang is just totally out of no where (you had this very precise rhyming stuff going on and then it's like, "oh hello random line of slang") but also a little abrupt and awkward. I don't know... keep it if you want, but I would add in another slang line somewhere or delete it; it feels a little weird by itself.

I feel like I just said "slang" like fifty times haha whatever

I also think the end stanza is kind of awkward... especially the last two lines; I can't really figure out what they mean. Also, the word "copying" seems a little chunky.

Okay, so those were my feedback items, now for the good stuff

I like how you rhyme in this poem it doesn't feel very forced.

I also like how you keep repeating the forwards backwards etc. stuff. It makes me almost feel like you were swaying around in circles in front of a mirror when you wrote this, watching your reflection with fascination... it's a funny image XD

Overall, I thought liked this It was very fun and *reflective*

Hey there!

I like this mirror image idea, and I like how you repeated the beginning of it at the end (though I almost feel like you could have ended it as a repeat, and it may have been stronger).

On the 5th stanza, your rhyming scheme changes! Now, for the most part I'm cool with rhyming, and it seems to suit this reflective ( ) poem enough, but what really bothers me is when the pattern is lost. I just don't find there any point in a poem rhyming one way, and then switching or missing a beat somewhere. I personally think they sound better when there's a pattern, and when the pattern is followed throughout the piece.

Straight-wards side-wards,

around the frame-wards.

Hi SnazzyPencil,

Not really sure what to think about this one. I think some aspects of this poem are really good, but you fall flat on other areas. I like that you're using the sing-songy rhyming of a child's story. It adds to the odd feel of this poem and gives us expectations to be off the grid, and out of what's normal in our own world. I like that. We're prepared for "Green Eggs and Ham" you could say.

I think you need to improve on your delivery of the message however. The tone you've set in this poem is sort of threatening when you read it. It's like it's trying really hard to be chipper, and then it starts warning you and threatening you out of nowhere. The last stanza is where it really stands out to me. "Just be glad you're human" well, okay then, I'll be glad I'm human. What does that make you? Why are you telling me to be glad about anything? Can't you just show me?

I feel like if you diled that down, the poem would come across better. If you want us to be glad we're unique, then why not show us how that really affects the lifestyle of this speaker? I mean, he seems to be getting his message across just fine to me.

Also, I don't understand the last two lines. The "lender" of what? What is that even? I feel like you forgot to add it because it's italicized. How does this relate to the poem before that point? If we had a little bit clearer idea of where the speaker was coming from saying those things, which could be done in a stanza, then we'd get a better response.

So overall, I love what you did with how you said what you wanted to say, but I don't understand the last stanza. I think it's too strong compared to the rest of the poem, and off putting because of the declarative nature.

Hope this helps!

Aley