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Young Writers Society



Hot Cocoa

by Snazzy


Hot cocoa
on midwinter days.
The days when fragments of ice
decorated your yard
and icicles dangled
from your roof
that dad said he would fix
but never did.
-
Hot cocoa
on cold icy nights.
The nights when mom
used to say
"be careful"
when you walked down the steps,
and bandaged your knee
when you fell.
-
Hot coca
on chilly mornings.
The mornings when grandma
would take you outside with
extra gloves when you waited
for the school bus,
and sent you out with warm kisses
and hugs.
-
Hot cocoa
on frozen evenings.
Evenings when grandpa
would build a snowman with you
and would move him
to the cellar,
when he began
to melt.
-
Hot Cocoa
on snowy afternoons.
Afternoons when your brother
would have a snowball fight
with you and his friends
and would get into a fight
if the other boys
were playing
too rough.
-
Your roof is still broken,
you still fall down the stairs
and put on extra gloves
to build snowmen.
You still throw snowballs
every once in a while
and let hot cocoa's warm aroma
tickle your nose.
-
And you drink hot cocoa
on listless winter days.
Days when you miss
your grandpa and grandma
and mom and dad
and brother,
and all those times you could've said
"I love you."
But you didn't,
and now,

you can't.


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Mon Jan 16, 2017 9:41 pm
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I like this poem a lot. This is filled with truth and how life can go over time. I had a troubled childhood, but I can feel the love that someone may of had with their own parents and grandparents. The end was great too, as a sweet poem stung you in the end. That's life. Sweet and can sting you sometimes.

The only thing I have to say to this is that I felt the poem was a little too wordy and too 'smashed together' but perhaps you'll figure it out. Keep on writing :)




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Well dang this is me, Whosabell, with a review!
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I love this poem because it's truthful and full of childhood. The writing style was smooth and compelling. The things you say when your dad tells you to be careful, and later bandages your knee when you fell. There is humor, and the sweetness mostly all of us feel when our grandma brings us kisses and warmth. The ending made me sad. That is true, my grandpa passed away this past summer and I still want to tell him I love him. Then a few months later my Great grandma passed as well.

It's hard growing up. It's easy to get swept up in the memories when you smell a certian thing, or taste a certain thing. Thank You for writing this...

Whosabellxx





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