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this is actually very interesting. I wouldn't recommend a title change at all, it fits. it's so relatable too. I feel like you truly meant all that you said in this poem. I wonder where you got your inspiration because a piece like this always has a backstory. how could it not if it is so passionate? the rhyme scheme correlates so well with the flow and rhythm in this poem. the idea is quite original. I rate 5/5. I would absolutely love to see more of your work. (p.s. the vocabulary was top notch as well!)

~ sorry for my inability to write a proper review, but in lament's terms, the poem is awesome.

Hey Snazzy~

This is a neat poem, I like the past changing idea.

If I could change the past,
would I be strong enough,
brave enough,
to alter the winds of time?

If I could change the past
just how much would I change?
Would I change the good, the bad,
the strange?

How can I change the past
when my present is
so weak?

Hello Snazzy!
Your poem was short, beautiful, powerful and I absolutely loved it. The message that you included in this is very strong. I really enjoyed reading this.

Hey, Snazzy! It's ScytheMeister here for a quick review

This was beautiful; short, simple and easy read. I loved the reoccurring message in the poem, it really was not hard to pick up on and I think this is why it was so great. I could tell that what the person was trying to say was she is took weak (or rather, she believes she has no ability to do something greater than herself. E.i. she has low confidence)

However, I potentially picked up on something. The repeated line "If I could change the past" portrays that something has occurred in her past, something she has no grasp of and is something holding her down, metaphorically speaking.

She is considering herself "weak" now and that in order to overcome that belief, she needs to "change the past" or rather, what she really needs to do is accept the past. Rather than change it. When she says "change" it almost seems as if she's running from it, rather than accepting it.

She needs to overcome it to make the future less "desolate and bleak".

This was short, I failed to find anything grammatically wrong. Good Job! I hope to read more like this ^-^

Keep Writing! <3

- ScytheMeister

Really simple, beautiful poem. Its very easy to read and flows. It is open to personal interpretation, but as a reader I'm really curious why the speaker's present is so weak, and why the future is so desolate and bleak. Why would changing the past make the future weak?