Writing is a gift.
Drawing is one too.
Laughing, singing,
dancing, running,
just to name a few.
But some gifts are hidden,
I'm afraid this is true.
I'm using my gift,
Now, will you?
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Wow! This poem was great, but when I got to the ending I wanted it to keep going. It was really good. I encourage you to possibly write a little more in this poem.
This is great. I'm pretty sure everyone can relate to this, whether they hide their gifts or show them. Though as I said before I was sad how this poem ended so fast. I was hoping it would be longer. Either way, this poem is beautiful.
I found a nitpick in here though.
Okay, I actually changed my mind. This isn't really a nitpick, but it sort of is. I saw that in your whole poem your words were uncapitalized. Then you wrote: "Now will you?". You should just uncapitalize "now".
I like the cuteness and simplicity of this poem, it was nice. But I keep having this feeling it should be longer. To improve on it, that is the main thing that's most important to me.
The way you ended this poem in a question was great. It was sort of like a cliffhanger. I like how it leaves you wondering about it.
Keep writing poems like this!
- Sunset101
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Hello there snazzy name of a pencil. Great job! I would've like it to be a little longer to get more of your point across, but that's not really a problem. I don't really understand your last few lines. If one's gift is hidden, are you saying you're hiding your gift or telling other's not to hide theirs or what. That's really the only part I didn't get. Good job! Keep writing!
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Hullo Snazzy!
I love how this poem is short, simple and readable. I like how it sticks the topic and has a nice flow. However I do feel like you could have created a rhyming scheme for it as the rhymes that are there are all over the place. I like how you start off the poem with a simple yet effective line. By saying writing is a gift, you create an image in my mind. This image is of a book with words flying out and linking together to form the shape of a present. I like how you finish with Now, will you? As it leaves a question in the readers mind to think about and act upon. However, Now should not be capitalised as there is a comma after gift.
That's all from me,
Godly
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Hm. I think this really would have been better if it were longer--the short length of the poem doesn't really convey any sort of message. Forgive me but I think that poems are supposed to convey some kind of message, and I'm not getting much, save for the last four lines;
"But some gifts are hidden,
I'm afraid this is true.
I'm using my gift,
Now, will you?"
This leaves some wonder and curiosity--what is the gift? I really enjoy these lines, they're very nice. However, the rest of it is quite vague and almost flat.
All in all, I think it's an alright poem, probably a 6/10. If you want to edit it, I'd suggest adding some more detail and elaborating more in the beginning, but keep the last four lines as they are. Keep on writing!
Thanks for the review!
Wow, that's pretty good.
Its short, but I think that it works very well for this poem. I like how you smoothly wrapped up the ending, especially the last line. I also really like this line; 'But some gifts are hidden'. I bet there are a lot of people who have gifts that they don't know about. 
Really great poem though!
~BookWolf
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