the day i spoke my mind

Hey there Snazzy! Time for a review.
This poem is sooo realistic..,people ask us to socialize ,speak our mind out,feel home and stuff but, the minute we do it...that's it....loudmouths talk,comments as we walk,crackheads stalk and every little imaginable thing.Your poem is beautifully written to the point.Really appreciate the way you used short sentences that's something totally impossible with me,I try but fail.
The most important part which you missed is capitalization.Use a'T' and 'I' for the title ,that looks way better than 'the day i spoke my mind out'.

"i remind myself

to breathe
and try to dry
my sweaty palms."

Better don't leave that space between the first and second sentence.It's disturbing the consistency of the poem. And use capitalized letters for new sentences here too. You can make the 1st and 2nd line a single sentence.Then start the third sentence with 'A' that indicates a strict pattern in your poem.Really like the part 'and try to dry'....It literally took me into my imaginary world.Anyways the thoughts were really nice.

"i've finally found my
solid ground
(and hope that
i can stand)."
So go by the rule of capitalization in this stanza too.And I'd better say not to use those brackets there.I somehow didn't really like that...'cause that gives a look like your stressing on that particular line or something.And I'd like to change that sentence a bit...it's just a suggestion though...."With a hope that I can stand." Anyways you can do way better than that sentence.

"i open up my mouth
and let
my heart
do all the talking."

The word here 'open up' on it's own means to start to talk more 'bout yourself or your feelings.So I'd suggest to omit the words 'my mouth'.Rest is good.

"i show the world
what i've
been hiding and
finally speak my mind.

Capitalization here too.I'd like to edit the 3rd sentence just a bit...If you don't want it,you can stick to this....'....been hiding to finally speak my mind.The word 'to ' here shows the urge of the writers to clear her/his mind...'and' doesn't really give that kick.

"and all i receive is hate
and distaste,
and "homophobic!"
and "you ignorant prude!"

This part is great.Liked the rhymes 'hate' and 'distaste'.The use of 'and in every sentence is awesome too.Great way of writing!

"and i never wanted
to think
the world could ever be
so rude."

Awesome...just use capitals here too,a comma at the end of the 2nd line should do.That's it...everything's great here.

Hope my review was of help...and sorry for the nitpicks though....

Great work!!Keep posting.

-Lily^_^.

It was a short poem showing the facts of the day to day life of many people. It was composed well but, could have been better.

This is Nikayla here for a review.

I think that the start to this poem is something that could be stronger by using more imagery about the sweaty palms and perhaps swapping that out for "clammy hands" to get something of a stronger effect. We see that the author is having trouble speaking their mind, particularly it seems about political issues but it can really be anything with them not being able to take one stance. Stanza two shows us that the speaker is unsteady with their opinions, or at least isn't able to stand with them which is one of the reasons it seems to be why they're not very good at expressing their opinions all that much? The stanza isn't very long and wasn't all that strong in what it's trying to get across, and I feel the same way with the next one too. We get the whole 'speak from your heart' message.

In the poem they're called a 'homophobe' and an 'ignorant prude' which I don't know why they're called either of these, but I doubt that there wasn't anything to spark those emotions. It seems that the speaker is someone who may be afraid to speak their mind because they don't believe in LGBT rights, which is something that's fine as long as the speaker isn't harming other people with this opinion of course, but I stray away from that sort of thing. As for them being called an, 'ignorant prude', I don't know how this really relates to anything else and seems just a little tossed in there.

If you could have given me more valid reasoning to believe that the speaker doesn't have a reason to speak their mind. It's not like people who happen to be against that sort of thing are in the minority when it comes to the entire world which for me, defeats the purpose of the poem, so I think you can come up with better reasons than that. Maybe the speaker isn't even against LGBT rights--it's not really all that much explained in the poem. I want more reason to care about the speaker. Give us more imagery with this and give us more strength in your lines, and then maybe I can get further behind the message.

You put this as spiritual, so I'm assuming this has to do with the speaker's religion, but I could be wrong. I can see how some people can hate on certain religions, but hate goes to anyone and everyone when it comes to that sort of thing, so I don't think that the speaker is exclusive to it.

I would find it better if the speaker does end up standing their ground instead of contradicting something they say so they don't get hate, because I find it worse to be the former. I want to see a more powerful and packing message at the end of the poem, so give us that. Keep playing around with the structure, since I think that was more of a strength. Give us that more powerful ending where we feel the impact.

Nonetheless, that's all I had for you today. I hope I helped and have a great day. Apologies if it sounds or has the tone of being rude, because I feel as if it can come off that way. ^^

Hello there. I hope to give a fair review. Trying to do the YWS review sandwich for the first time.

What I liked— I really liked that the poem is short and to the point. Straight and simple narrative. I also liked that each stanza was just one line. But the thing which I loved was the use of those words in the brackets, and the third stanza. The use of 'and' repeatedly creates a flow. I also liked— 'try to dry'. It's so much in flow.

What can be improved— I like original piece of work, but sometimes a little editing can work. There is nothing much to edit, except the second last stanza, and only if you want the last two stanzas to rhyme better. Otherwise no need of that. Why don't you use capital letters though? I also didn't get the title. It doesn't go well with the content. I believe title should give a little summary or should invoke the interest of readers.

Overall— A good piece of work, but I was unable to feel any impact on reading, except that last stanza. Maybe it's because I am not an emotional person. I believe you can give depth to it by adding some good words. But still it's a simple and good work. Keep it up!