We are the delusional dreamers,
we are the wishful ones.
We are the hopeful hearers,
the creators of horrible puns.
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We are the romantic riddlers,
we are the fantasy freaks.
We are the hilarious hearts,
the center of glorious geeks.
~
We are the coffee consumers,
we are the night-time nuts.
We are the joking jousters,
the ones who get stuck in ruts...
~
We are the mischief makers,
we are the loveable lot.
We are the studious students,
the people who killed the 'tot'.
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We are the murderous many,
we are what 'tired' means.
We are the pencil pickers,
the ones who stare at blank screens.
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We hope, we dream,
we rise, we fall.
We raise hope in souls-
We're writers, after all.
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You have done an amazing job. I am sure we all can relate to your poem. Your work is original, yet creative and nice. Writers indeed are dreamers and satirists. Sometimes they are referred to as geeks too, just like you have written. You can also include the facts that writers are worshipers of their pen and take the fact cliche, actually, ''the pen is mightier than the sword'' to their hearts. They try hard to change the view of people on a particular situation and some also work on improving others' lives, which is a kind of sacrifice.
Another thing about your work is that though you generalized the case, you can't actually skip out the exceptions. Like all writers are not geeks. Some are on the contrary popular and admired. And though all are dreamers but this is mingled with practicalism too.
Finally you may also include the description of the struggle that all have to face.
But overall your work is good, as I said at first.
I don't usually review poetry, but when I do, it's because I heard F. Scott Fitzgerald's name being used somewhere.
Anyway, the compliments:
I may be biased because I am a writer (aren't we all?), but I like this. Not as much as I should honestly, but I do like this. I like how it doesn't just describe writers as 'people who write' but paints a picture of their everyday lives, their quiet and usually boring existences compared to their wild fantasies. Lovely sentiment.
Then, the assault:
While I love alliterations, I laughed out loud when I heard "studious students". I feel that's a little redundant. I'll leave the rest to the poets, as I'm nothing more than a pretender. But as a short story writer, I feel that you should draw writers as what they really are--madmen. Well, not really, but what I'm saying is I wasn't exactly sold on why writers are 'special'. Controversial, I know, but if writers are delusional dreamers, what do they dream about? If they are the murderous many, what do they murder? If they are loveable lots, what makes them loveable?
In other words, I suggest a little more detail just to paint the writers' existence as the shining and exuberant life as you say it is. But other than that, I quite liked it.
So, in conclusion?
If you could see me I would be branding a thumbs up and wearing 'Not Bad' Obama face. Good job on this one!