Disclaimer: This rap was written in my Social Studies class my friend and I wrote. It was an assignment to write a rap about capitalism and communism. We based it off of the Kevin G. rap in Mean Girls. Enjoy!
Yo, yo, all them,
communists see, they got nothing on me!
From NAFTA to GFD
they can't touch our economy!
We not communists,
because command is demand
so forget that it's grand
communism is bland!
Sh-sh-shaken not stirred we capitalists,
it's something that we insist,
and when it comes to communism it's something we dismiss!
We don't play it like Marx,
you'll know it was Smith!
The next time you see us you'll be like,
"Oh! Capitalism isn't a myth!"
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I wish this was longer, just because it's so fun.
You're the first featured!
Yay!
I laughed so hard over this one my sister told me to shut up. This one was too funny to handle!
You did a really good job Salty. I didn't notice any grammar, or punctuation mistakes. This is going to be the shortest review ever. I just want to say this is the funniest poem I've read. I read it aloud to my older siblings, and they laughed really hard. My sister almost fell off of her chair! You did the best Salty. Good luck on your next!
Thanks!
You're welcome!
Great job!
I have only one thing to say.
In the disclaimer, wrote should be written.
The things I come across on YWS...
You kids... XD I major in Psychology and Social Sciences, so this made me laugh. Ever seen Epic Rap Battles? It would be great to see a rap from the left wing, as a reply to this. Hehe.
I love ERB!
I do too. It's amazing how the come up with that!
communism is a strong sense of community right?
No. It's racism.
In theory, both capitalism and communism supposedly privilege human well being over greed and classicism. Because in theory a lot of ideas are utopias. Don't argue over it. I promise, it's not worth it.
Love and respect are more important things.
Socialism is just being talkative right?
Socialism is basically communism and capitalism combined.
what about a capitalistic socialism?
I don't think that would be capitalism ahaha. @jayflames1
... Are you sure?
Yo, my man,
wonder here.
Captain. I see you rappin'!!! <3
Haha how's that? I liked yo rap. It was pretty cool. Maybe you should make it into a song. Anyways, I have some tips for you, not necessarily a correction. You have:
Yo, yo, all them,
communists see, they got nothing on me!
Not to change your cool rap but I think it'd sound cooler if it was like this:
Yo, yo, dem all,
Communists see, they aint got nothin' on me!
I don't know a lot of slang there but if your rappin' everyone's clappin'. Also the end I was a bit confused what does "Oh! Capitalism isn't a myth!" mean? But you know I'm not going to go on. Cool rap! I thought it had a lot of nice beats in there. Also, don't be afraid to slap your reader with a comment to challenge their beliefs. P.s. Maybe you should write more raps with your buddy. Keep writing and NEVER get discouraged!
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