“you’re my world.”

This poem gives me the imagery of a hopeless romantic, someone who guides more with their heart rather than their head (how I can relate to this A very romantic poem that is very personal, and has a very soft tone of voice associated with the words attached. I like how quotations of phrases that have been said are added in, creating characters but the readers produce them in their mind using their imagination, meaning that the poem is much more intriguing and engaging with its readers which I enjoyed.

A tip would be to carry the poem on a bit more. Invest more of your own personal experiences of love and romance within your poem.

I hope this helps

Very inspirational and cute. Nice work on keeping the same concept in the second stanza, but applying it to a person instead of nature.

Maybe you could find a better word to replaced "muddled" though. . .?

Hiya! Just dropping in with a review!:D

I gotta say, I really really love this. Most poetry is conformed to structure or rhyming patterns that define it as poetry, otherwise I've found, it's less accepted as poetry. But this proves against that need for patterns and rhymes because even without it, it flows in a way that tells you it's poetry. And it's absolutely beautiful.

The way you've used mostly very simple words, creates wonderful imagery and allows for the reader to easily follow along with the story being told. I loved the repetition of lines like "i fell in love", "blissfully and gently." and "muddled their way" in both stanzas because when you repeated the words in a different context, with different lines that followed, it showed depth of meaning in their simplicity.

I really don't have any criticisms about this poem because I loved absolutely every line of it. And it made me think about the most important person in my life, how she's the one who keeps me sane in an insane world. Those are the best kinds of poems in my eyes, the ones that you can relate to without even fully realizing it the first time you read it. Because their meaning is something more than just the words being read, it's the way those words pave a path to your head and your heart and stay there as they echo in your mind.

Really good job with this poem, I really really enjoyed it a lot. Hope you have a good day! (or night depending on your timezone)

~Mack

Hiii!

I wish I could say I'm going to have a helpful review, but I really enjoyed this piece. I adore the imagery here, the word choice used to depict said image, and how it ties into the title itself. It's very descriptive and paints a beautiful picture the entire way.

And then at the end, is this "cacophony of hatred" phrase that completely flips it all around. The way it ends leaves so much to the imagination.

After having read it a few times, it occurred to me that the opening sequence has the moon chasing the sun, which usually refers to nighttime, but it immediately goes into a sapphire sky being muddled with clouds to indicate weather/storms brewing in. I think this might be conflicting imagery? As I would usually depict a sapphire sky as a daytime sky.

It's fun to think how the imagery of the pieces has this idea that beautiful days can be overcome with weather or nighttime, much like how hatred can overshadow peace and goodness. I think some tweaking to better convey that idea will be just the touch for this piece.

But this is all food for thought! I really did enjoy your piece. I think you did a wonderful job.

Keep writing!

Jabber, the One and Only!