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A Haiku About Finals

No no no no no

No no no no no no no

No no no and no

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Gymnast2801
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Hello Elysium, fellow Team Weasley member there with a review!

Hahaha, I love this poem! Well, I'm not sure that I would mark it as a poem but...what else would it be?

This work is very relatable and the only thing I have for you is this:

Add commas after "no". No is almost your only word so this shouldn't be hard to find/work on.

Great job and keep writing!
-Gymnast2801 for Team Weasely.

Thank you for the review, but I would rather not add the commas. I personally think it looks okay how it is.

Okay.
I am not very good at reviewing poems but I try. I should I probably read up on different kinds of poems at some point

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slytherwin Comment

Saaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaame

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wakarimasen
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Hey Elysium! This is Allison, stopping by for a review. :)

All I can say is wow, this poem is so amazing.... You write with such emotion that, as a reader (and fellow student) I can relate to this piece no matter my grade level.

Your word choices, however, are a bit repetitive - my thesaurus had some synonyms for "no," such as: most certainly not, nay, negative, nope, uh-uh, nah, not on your life, no way, no way José, and ixnay.

You're off to a great start - keep up the great work!

Thank you! I originally thought about doing that, but I couldn't think of other "no" words

Well, you did pretty well - there really are *no* words to describe the feelings of great distress associated with finals. :D

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Rydia
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Rydia wrote a review · Wed May 18, 2016 6:58 am

Okay this is not what I was expecting xD I was going to come here and say that I don't normally like Haikus but I'm willing to give it a look if YWS thinks it's the best poem out there and yeah... YWS never fails to be right. It's silly and fun and the only small change I'd suggest is maybe putting a full-stop after the first no so that it mirrors the end. But since it's not serious it doesn't really matter!

I'd be interested i seeing a real haiku on finals though. I think it's the kind of subject where you would be able to make a comparison with nature, or where you could talk about the nature outside the exam room window. I know my school used to close the blinds if we had an exam in a classroom to stop us just staring out the windows but sometimes I'd stare at the blinds anyway. We did most of our exams in the Sports Hall and the window were too high to see out of there but it was still safer than staring at other people while trying to calculate or you could look like you were cheating.

Anyway, this was fun!

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rainforest
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Note: I know this is a Senryu, but I will leave it at Haiku because it seems like a Haiku is a better known name for a poem like this, although they are two different subject matters.

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insertwordshere
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This is perfect xD

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Kazumi
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I expected this to be something serious, something deep, something beautiful.

You never disappoint.

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Aley
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A Senryu* about finals... >>;
-hides-

to be a haiku it would have to include something about nature, like, trees, season, etc. Otherwise it's a senryu. NOT THAT IT MATTERS, but, you know...

I mean, no one would understand that it is supposed to be 5-7-5 if you said a Senryu about Finals, they'd just think you've got the name wrong... but awareness!

I don't know, there are 5-7-5 poems that talk about modern things like buildings and technology and elections but are still considered haiku/modern haiku.

I don't know, really. Just my two cents on it.

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bluewaterlily
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Not what I was expecting. But truer words have never been spoken. Happy Finals Week my friend and may the curve be ever in your favor.

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DeathPrince Comment

awesome i guess ????????????????????????????? wtf i don't even know what to say

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RippleGylf
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This haiku is just flat-out hilarious. :D While it doesn't talk about nature like a traditional haiku would, it is definitely relatable. The simple repetition of one word adds a humorous tone to the entire piece. Your use of "and" seems to imply that you are listing off "and"s instead of simply repeating the same word over and over. I quite enjoyed reading it. :)

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TahaT11n
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that's the best haiku in the whole world ..
Basho would just stare at it with surprise and he would be speechless.

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Lightsong
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This is a masterpiece. xD



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