A Poem Wrote in the Perspective of an Eight Year Old Girl

Hello, Elysium.

Personally, I think that this is about the writing level of a 5 or 6 year old. Give 8 year olds more credit!

I also don't think that the long title is necessary. The work speaks for itself. I also doubt that an eight year old would say, "OMG" or spell "cuz" or "SOOOO" in that way. Maybe the "So." But in general, eight year-olds take themselves pretty seriously, and probably would take great care to make sure they were spelling everything correctly.

Satire, when done well (I think), is accurate enough to produce chuckles. This makes me vaguely uncomfortable because it doesn't seem very realistic to me. It seems like a teenager somewhere making fun of a little kid, but in the process, made themselves look silly.

In my experience, by eight, I learned some of the basic poetry formats. I probably would have tried to make it rhyme, or done an acrostic. Boy, did I love acrostics. Try putting this into a form that an eight year-old might have learned in school. I wouldn't have even thought this was a poem when I was eight. I thought they all had to rhyme, or be in some kind of special form.

Altogether, I understand the idea you're trying to get across, but I don't think it's particularly well executed. I don't even think this is comic sans, though? Anyway, I hope that you found this review useful to you. Happy writing.

I can totally see how an 8-year old would be writing this! I'd correct your grammar and the like but it's obviously intentional. Not very creative, not to knock you down. I'm sure if you scraped around a bit you'd find something else to add a little depth to the poetry. I don't know. It was funny though and that was the point!

Oh my gosh, this was SSOOOOOO cute! I loved this so much. I have a little sister who's 8, and she absolutely ADORES unicorns. When I was reading this poem, I thought to so much about Agness from Despicable Me, who if you've seen it, loves unicorns.

I thought this was adorable, as I said, and know it was very well written. I alos liked the way you used huge font to make it look like it was written by an 8-year-old. Good job and keep writing!!