Hello myjaspercat! LadyShadows here for a review!
Of course I would be known by you, as I have reviewed poems from you before, and like said, I'm becoming a fan! However in my opinion, this could be a weaker poem of yours. I liked it, but it did not have as much of a 'grab' as the others I've read did. Being a romantic poem, I loved the fact that you used french for 'my love.' It gave it an interesting twist, but how the way the poem was set, it just did not fit. It ruined the flow of the poem. And I think there might have been a bit of wordiness as well. And avoid casual talk. you have the word 'cause' in the poem. I think it would be best for you to have 'because' in there instead. Lastly 'afraid of being afraid' just gets to me. This is all I have to say. However it was a good thing for you to be a bit repetitive in the poem. Not every poem does that. Have a good day Keep writing.
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