Hey there! This is a good little poem. Morbid, but it's pretty good.

Makes the reader think about what it would be like if they bled out. You utilize the senses of sound, touch, vision, and taste, that is a pretty good touch to it. I liked how you compared it to rain, and how you said that it does not fall from the sky.

I felt that the "Tap.Tap.Tap." bit was a bit overused, especially because the stanzas are so short. Maybe you could have used it once or twice at the beginning and once at the very end.

The structure of the poem is a bit awkward. In one stanza the verses are long, and in the next they are short. It takes away from the whole musical aspect of poetry, and the visual shape of the entire poem. Definitely something worth taking into consideration.

I hope this review helps!

Overall, you've done pretty well in composing this piece. There are, however, a few areas you may consider further working on as to strengthen this poem.

I think that by strengthening each phrase, you could make this poem pack more of a punch. Paint the picture, don't just explain it. While you do a nice job explaining what's happening, your readers would be for more touched by the words you write if they painted their own picture.

Also, there are a few grammatical and punctuation errors throughout the poem. I'm sure that you're a strong enough writer to find them, and that a reread could clear them all up.

In some cases throughout the poem, you've left phrases as what I'd x consider a fragment. I can understand that you're trying to create a certain feeling by doing that, but it's something you may consider changing.

Now, enough with the critiquing. I really enjoyed how you set the tone of this piece with the song lyrics at the beginning. It brought depth to your words.

Adding to that, I love the repetition of the first phrase. It helped strengthen the feeling that the reader got from reading your words.

Happy writing
-Emily

I love the cadence in this piece (and I use that term colloquially). I especially love the change in momentum in the second to last stanza with "As they close I feel some relief from the pain."

I think the phrasing and tempo are what draws me into the piece, and are probably what will seem the most attractive or profound to a reader or critic. However, I feel like this poem is lacking in some sort of thread that can tie the sensationalism of the imagery and narrative to an underlying message, which I'm sure is there, and may even be further apparent if I was an Imagine Dragon's fan (or perhaps not).

Even though the word does little to describe the particular situation, this poem lacks the essential "edge." While I appreciate the repetition of the "Tap.Tap.Tap" and its unconventional punctuation and it's singular truncation in the final verse, it doesn't really fulfill me in a reading, out loud or in my head. It's an important element to the poem, of course, but I feel that it should not remain uniform or even stationary, throughout the fabric of these stanzas.

Perhaps you can add in a piece of metaphoric imagery that can create a slightly extended analogy to complement or perhaps supplement to your intended meaning, because I can't quite decipher what it is, and I want to know. If this poem is purely sensational, I would still argue to change up the repeated Taps, as they will eventually lose their loudness as people's ears adjust.

Overall, great poetic pacing, admirable word choice, but it requires more effort to succeed in the profundity department.