Hey hey I hope you're well!
Okay.
So I am here to review. (I'm trying okay please forgive me if this isn't exactly helpful)
Okay:
First of all, beautiful piece. I love this. It's powerful and yeah. Great job!
But sadly there are some things I did not like.
Okay the "ands"
honestly you can cut them out. Like theyre tacky and tacky isn't good when it comes to poetry. Like I read the poem without the ands and it sounded a whole lot better and yeah.
The rhythm was okay to me. Plus poetry, I noticed it doesn't really need rhythm to be honest Well it does sometimes but yeah . Anyway I hope this helps and I can't wait to read more of your works! Bye friend!
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