Snap!
Something breaks.
Then I shake.
Its fine. Your okay. I am here.
Someone whispers into my ear.
And I decided that I won't disappear.
Please, don't leave. Please, I need you.
Leaving is not an option.
And no longer shall corruption reign over me.
Because your okay.
Because I am okay.
I wrote this in the middle of Spanish so bear with me and it took me about five minutes so eh. Also, I AM GOOD. *cough cough @LordTachanka cough cough*
Hello Flumadiddle! Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!Give me your soul.
With that aside, I'm not the best at poetry but here we go!
Bold = grammar and flow issues.
Italics = suggestions and overallStrikethrough = remove
Underline = krazy Kara komments.
Hmmmm I am just like okay....
I don't know if this is about wanting to leave like, dying, or actually leaving, like a place. Could you clarify that for me?
I really like this. Either way, this person really wants you to stay, and wants you to know you are safe and that yeah.
Good job E.E. I mean, this is awesome considering you did it in spanish lol.
Izzy
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