So, I guess the world has been dethroned,
Underneath the layers of unknown,
Layers of friends to be found.
Light, Dark, Health.
You three are the brightness in this world, while I feel like the hoarded wealth.
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Hi Izzy here for a second review cause the other one accidently got deleted (oops)
I think this is awesome what you are doing with your characters and how you are making them more...human.
This is a good poem about Sully and who he is and how he needs his friends...
Yes? No? Maybe?
I haven't even got to chapter three yet in SMSU
Don't kill me.
Okay I have to go take another test on EAP now!
Izzy
Yup.
Hello Flumadiddle! Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!
So, I guess the world has been dethroned,
Give me your soul.With that aside, I'm not the best at poetry but here we go!
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Spoiler
Underneath the layers of unknown,
Lays that of friends to be found. {Wut}
Light, {d}ark, {h}ealth.
You three are the brightness in this world, while I feel like the hoarded wealth.
My interpretation:
This doesn't need an interpretation
Overall:
Cute poem about Sully. It really shows a lot about his character. What I would recommend would be to add this into the book somehow. That would really hit the readers hard
Why haven’t you given me your soul yet? --
Kara
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