Never again will I trust another.
And yet, you pop up.
Yellow, Blue, White, the color of you three.
Lets see, another might agree,
Even Death has a place in this odd company.
To one and the same, I am insane.
Honestly, you think I would last without the rest of me?
Authors note - This is to help me understand my character for my novel Something More, Something Unique Chapter 1 better. Her name is Nayleth. I will also do one for Griffin, the second main character, as well as J and Sully.
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@RavenLord
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Hello Flumadiddle! Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!
Never again will I trust another.
Give me your soul.With that aside, I'm not the best at poetry but here we go!
Bold = grammar and flow issues.
Italics = suggestions and overall
Strikethrough= removeUnderline = krazy Kara komments.
Spoiler
And yet, you pop up.
Yellow, {b}lue, {w}hite, the color of you three.
Let{'}s see, another might agree,
Even that Death has a place in this odd company. {This sentence is weirdly worded grammar-wise}
To one and the same, I am insane. {Same though}
Honestly, {do} you think I would last without the rest of me?
My interpretation:
Well it's just a poem about Nayleth, ain't it?
Overall:
Overall, I liked. I could imagine this as a poem about yourself. Great job and keep up the great work!
Why haven’t you given me your soul yet? --
Kara
I have the colors capitilized so that they stand out more, so that there meaning emphasied.
I JUST READ OVER THIS AND YOU SAID THIS COULD BE A POEM ABOUT ME PLEASE ELABORATE.
Hey Em, Izzy here for a review!
I really like this, and it makes your character look like an actual person in the story, gives it some personality (I have yet to read Something More, Something Unique yet but I will)
I think this talks about someone breaking trust, and then someone new comes along, and they chose to trust again...and then it mentions death and I get lost haha
Overall, I love this and I hope you write more acrostics!
Izzy
I have been working on this story for over a year so one of the characters that will come in later will be Grim. My picture and persona onthis cite and my story is pure coincidence.
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Wow.
@RavenLord, whats with the wow?
It's good!
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