The Freak Freaks Out

by DeerInBacPac

Published December 12, 2017

In ...

People. 

Voices.

Clattering of harsh words.

Too much.

The noise...

--- Oh... not again. 

Left alone.

My brain is overreacting.

I can't think straight.

I can't see straight.

Oh well.

--- Freaking out, this is never good.

Please help.

I need you.

Please, I can't breath.

Too many people.

--- I feel so scattered.

I just need a hug.

I need hot chocolate.

I need sleep.

I need my books.

I need Skyrim.

I need my music.

I need things to block out others.

--- This is just... stop freaking out me, please... 

One.

Blank thoughts.

Two.

Shaking.

Three.

Freak out.

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LakeOfCancer
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LakeOfCancer wrote a review Review · Dec 12, 2017

If you're talking about what we talked about a few days ago, I' still here, so is Pollution but I don't think she'll help. She's such a Debbie-downer, even more than ME! But, if you need anything, come to me, whether you want me to send you a funny meme to cheer you up, whether you want advice, or even if you just want to talk about random crap, I will be here for you, and you alone. I kinda hope you don't come to me for a random conversation with Pollution, I don't want her to come out here toda-

*Pollution walks up silently behind Lake*

Pollution: Um, wow, never knew that you hated me so much.

*Sulks*

Pollution: Well, while I'm here, I miss you Grim! I can't stand this idiot!

*Grim looks over* You are not life. You are okay company. And Lake is a fantastic human.

*Pollution wathces screen and pushes Lake out of the way*

Pollution: You don't know her like I do...she's so irritating, the only good thing with her is that she is slightly aggressive and mean! She's always putting on a happy face!

*Pollution frowns, looking away*

*Grim gets irritated.* E.E, if I kill Pollution, don't revive them.

Never even crossed my mind.

SAME! Don't revive her either!XD I can always create a better version of Pollution later!XD

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Radrook
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Radrook wrote a review Review · Dec 12, 2017

Thanks for sharing this poem about a freak freaking out. You certainly effectively convey the frustration. As one who grew up being forced to listen to constant bickering I can appreciate exactly how the speaker feels. However, I never considered myself a freak because of my reaction. I saw the ones who were constantly bickering as freaks who were freaking out.

He describes the people who are causing him distress as freaking out via excessive arguing. I got the impression that the reason that he is being called a freak is because he is freaking out since nothing else about him is revealed. He lacks many amenities but the people aren't accused of depriving him of them. So I wondered why he is so deprived.

The speaker seems unable to block out the arguments. I wondered why. Is he locked in his room? He doesn't have a radio? Doesn't have all the things he mentions? Why? He spoke of too many people. So I imagined that there were more than two people freaking him out.


suggestion:

I had difficulty imagining what blank thoughts are.

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LittleLee
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LittleLee commented Comment · Dec 12, 2017

Oh wow, I totally feel like this sometimes

Yeah, it sucks.

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DeerInBacPac
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DeerInBacPac commented Comment · Dec 12, 2017

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Monster is a relative term. To a canary, a cat is a monster. We're just used to being the cat.
— Henry Wu, "Jurassic World"