Under and up, thats how my life goes.
Now people tell me, a lot, mind you,
I am Unique, different then different.
Quite worrying, this phrase is to me.
Under and up, thats how this thought is.
Even then, I am I too much me?
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Hi there! Hope you don't mind if I leave you a quick review.
I'm normally not a fan of acrostic poetry (especially writing it, as it can be very limiting) but you did a very good job on this. The only issues I see are grammar related...
"thats" should be "that's"
"then" should be "than"
"thats" should be "that's" again
And truly, these are very minor errors and nitpicks. But I loved your poem so if I didn't comment on these minor things, my review would have been short. I loved your use of "under and up" in here, and overall, this poem really resonated with me. "Unique", often being told one is different, it may make us feel like that is a bad thing, like we're too different. I'll be sure to check out more of your work, as I absolutely love this poem.
Keep writing,
-Katja
Thank you so much! Yeah, grammars not my forte. Check out my portfolio. I have at least twenty poems there!
I love it! There are some errors, but otherwise, it's great! I'm not that good at poetry. I really like the format.
Thank you! Welcome to YWS!
I like this it is a nice poem, but I may have spotted an error. Though I have no room to talk, that has never stopped me before. In the "I" line in the poem when you say:
" different then different" could you perhaps mean:
"different than different" ?
Then commonly used as a sense of time.
Than is used to compare.
and in the "Q" line when you say "Quite worrying" could you mean:
"Quit worrying" ?
Quite meaning to an considerable extent.
Quit meaning stop.
I hope this can help you.
I loved it entirely though.
Ok, Fluma, while there may be a couple grammar errors, it was still a wonderful poem, like you were explaining how you know that you're unique, but inside you tell yourself you're just like everyone else.
*Pollution looks at the review on computer screen*
Pollution: That's because she IS just like everyone else. Where has your rational mind gone Lake?!
Shut the hell up Pollution! Anyway, I think you did an amazing job writing this, if this isn't already on Spotlight, cause I haven't looked yet today, then it should be! Great job! Keep up the spectacular work Fluma!
*Pollution looks it over again*
Pollution: I will delete this and make you rewrite it Lake...
*Grim looks over* POLLUTION NO. WE TALKED ABOUT THIS.
Its about how I feel like i am too much me around certain people. I express myself to much.
It's good to express yourself, even if it is too much!
Pollution: Grim, I need this, life needs to die now, I need this.
Grim- You have confused me.
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I love this!
Thank you!
Hallo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Pollution: Stop being a weirdo.....no one likes that look on you.
*makes an evil smirk in response*
I loved it...