AHHHHH YOU POSTED IT YAY
I LOVE THIS POEM A LOT PAL
Moths.
Annoying,
Ugly,
Scary Moths.
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Humans.
Pretty,
Calm,
Smart Humans.
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Moths.
Fuzzy,
Adorable,
Dog-like Moths.
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Humans.
Monstrous,
Terrifying,
Anger-ridden Humans.
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This world is different,
From every page you enter.
Be it of the little guys,
Or the ones on top.
It's Joel, comming at cha with a review. Also... hi.
I like the flipped perspectives. Why is there no bolded phrase in the first stanza. Why is the last adjective and not the second adjective the bolded line in the 4th stanza? Why'd you use page instead as the chosen symbol in the last stanza when the last 2 lines haven't much to do with pages, unless it's a reference to the poem? Also, what do you think of a review in the forms of questions?
Hello Flumadiddle! Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!Give me your soul.
With that aside, I'm not the best at poetry but here we go!
Bold = grammar and flow issues.
Italics = suggestions and overallStrikethrough = remove
Underline = krazy Kara komments.
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