Am I a bothersome person?
Maybe I am, or maybe I'm not.
Indeed I am told this a lot, but don't worry.
This poem is a thought I have often or something I am told often. I am a-ok, so don't worry! Also, If you have a quote, go to my forum, Quotes! I need them for my novel!
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Hi Flumadiddle! Saru here for a hopefully helpful review!
I'm going to get constructive criticism out of the way first so we can get on with what was great about this.
You put a space before the 'I' in 'Indeed', and it kind of throws off the structure. Can you possibly delete that?
Since this is an acrostic poem, people read down the side, usually expecting to read a word. But when they do, they read "AMI", and have to do a double take. Do you think it would look ok if you put an extra paragraph in between "AM" and "I"?
And... that's it for constructive criticism! I liked this piece, and I feel like a lot of people (especially those of us with anxiety
Great job, keep writing!
~Saru
Pretty sure I am not Whosabell. Pretty sure. And thanks!
hhh I'm super sorry I copy and paste my review outline
Same here. Not a problem.
You do not bother me E.E
You are kind of awesome honestly
Wow! Haven't done Amy review in a while...it's refreshing to do this one more time!
* I know they are really short poems, but will i count this as one? not really. I think it would have made more sense in another category, you said it was a thought you've had in a while and you thought to write about it. Well good, So consider expanding this thought? Write it as it is in your head, but make a story out of it.
* Generally, such a nice thought and thank you for expressing it, I've been thinking of this for a while now, it's good to know, I'm not alone. But try touching it again...I know you can make this interesting, I've seen your works, it's captivating. look forward to seeing a more detailed piece. Not with verses though, but even 8 lines can make a while lot of sense.
Thank You!!!
My works are interesting... huh. And I am thinking about making this poem longer.
Short and sweet, nice. I'm not exactly sure if you meant this in a literal sense or not. It really does imply it. Despite the small author's note embedded with it, if you need anyone to talk to when you are down, don't be afraid to hit someone up about that. 'v'
As for the poem itself, since the first letters are bolded I'm assuming this is a acrostic poem. It's really nice and definitely stays on topic. I don't make too many poems myself but I still believe it's nicely done. Beauty is in the eye of the beholder~.
>Sam
Thanks! I have more poems if you would like to check them out in my Portfolio!
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