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Voices are a powerful thing
One voice can change peoples lives in ways you never expected
For better or worse
I made a descisions that would change so much more then just me.
Wait, heart... what are you doing?
Is the thought that runs through my brain.
I look at him and then I see the world so differnetly.
My world has become topsy-turvy.
Look! Look! Maybe he likes you!
My little heart yells and my brain feels like mush.
No, he couldn't. And why would he anyways? You are not even pretty.
My brain tells my little heart.
But... but... he's acting differently... he's more happy...
I know.
Says my brain but he stills doubts her, the heart.
Stop it, she'll never go for you.
I mean just look at you,
Your disgusting!
But I really like her. To me she's...perfect
It's almost like she was roped straight outta my dreams...
Oh, why do you do this brain? Let this monster take control?
My heart ask my brain.
Why do you tell yourself things you do are horrid but you know he'd love them?
My brain only looks at her with sorry eyes,
Hoping that my heart will see that my brain finally hopes as welll.
His laughter, do you hear it? Do you see his smile and the way he acts when hes around you?
Heart ask my brain.
Yes.
Is all my brain says,
For he knows he is finally swayed.
She's so amazing,
I find myself doing nothing but thinking about her.
That's it! I'm gonna do it!
Im asking her
But what if you freak her out?
She'll hate you...
Fuck it! If she hates me, she hates me!
I can't stand it I need to let her know how I feel.
But when do I ask?
You need to ask her as soon as possible
Tonight. Your doing it tonight
Ask him yourself. Tonight.
My heart tells my brain.
Okay.
My brain says.
And then tonight came.
Hey, E.E.?
Yes?
Umm, I need to ask something kinda stupid.
Please, ask away.
Will you do me the honor of being my girlfriend?
Hello @LordTachanka and Flumadiddle! Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!Give me your soul.
With that aside, I'm not the best at poetry but here we go!
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Hello,
For better or worse - loaded and painfully true statement.
I made decisions that would change so much more than just me - powerful words.
It's almost like she was roped straight outta my dreams - intriguing. She was pulled like a figment of wishful imagination straight out of his dreams.
Cute poem, it's kind of like reading text messages between him, her, her heart and her brain. It's young and sweet and innocent.
Thank you for sharing,
Dream
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