Get them here now.
Ring them in, make sure they know the real me.
Indeed, they might hate me but this world is crumbling too soon.
Make sure Mark tells Nat his secret, make sure Griffin finds his parents.
Heres the link to chapter one if you want to catch up! https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=137653#comments
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Hello Flumadiddle! Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!
Get them here now.
Give me your soul.With that aside, I'm not the best at poetry but here we go!
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Strikethrough= removeUnderline = krazy Kara komments.
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Ring them in, make sure they know the real me. {This is weirdly worded grammatically}
Indeed, they might hate me{,} but this world is crumbling too soon.
Make sure Mark tells Nat his secret, {and} make sure Griffin finds his parents
My interpretation:
I don't need an interpretation??
Overall:
I did like this poem. What did Grim think about it? A bit strange grammatically, but otherwise it was good! Keep up the great work.
Why haven’t you given me your soul yet? --
Kara
Thanks! I am debating about giving Grim a chapter or two. Should I?
And Grim loved it. As norm.
You sure know how to write a fantastic poem Fluma! And I congratulate you on getting this on Spotlight! I may have never told you about my alter ego, but you making this poem dedicated to Grim, it was just spectacular. I really love how you provide the link to Chapter One so that way people have an idea of what's going on and why you wrote this! Great job dude! Keep up the brilliant work!:)
*Pollution walks in*
Pollution: Dear god! Do you have to say that after EVERY review!?
Yes, yes I do.
THAT IS FANTASTIC HI POLLUTION!
YAY A POEM DEDICATED TO GRIM
*Hugs
*Grim looks over*
Ayyyyyye Lee!
*hugs back*
OH. MY. KEEPERS. THIS IS ON THE SPOTLIGHT. GRIM PART 7 IS ON THE SPOTLIGHT.
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