I want to scream.
I want to yell,
make my lungs burn.
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I am shaking,
I feel like I am about to break,
A tree in a lightning storm.
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I want to cry,
But people are here, in
The room across from mine --
The one below.
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I am shaking.
The keys are hardly clacking --
Instead, they are being smashed.
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I need a hug:
I need a person to tell me things will be okay.
I need a person who will help me,
A friend who won't turn their back.
I need a friend who I can be myself around.
I feel so alone.
A tree in the
middle of the desert.
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It's so cold here, at night.
Here in the desert,
Beasts roam free.
I have many that stalk me.
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I want to scream.
I want to have my throat feel like knives are
slicing it apart,
Destroying my means of talking.
---
I want to cry,
I want to cry until my eyes are bleeding.
Oh, how I wish I could cry my worries away.
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I feel like that I am freaking out
For no reason.
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Stay calm stay calm
staycalmstaycalmstaycalm
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Maybe I am calm.
For now.
AN// Thank you @DemonGoddess for helping me with my grammar on this poem and with a line or two!!!
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btw I caused this
I made her poem rant
yes. from now I just need to poem rant. it works very well
Wow that was really good
And I know you know this but I'm always here for you
I know hon. I know. This is my personal favorite of mine. By far my best.
Oh yeah I completely agree
Danke shun
@LordTachanka
Hello! You've done a good job with this poem. Capturing emotions is difficult, much less getting others to relate to those emotions. I certainly related to this poem. I think it hits everyone a different way, because most everyone has been in the place this poem was written in, mentally, of course.
One thing I would suggest changing is in the sixth stanza, the last line seems awkward (as everything usually does to my awkward brain). I would suggest cutting it, unless it holds super emotional value.
Overall, I enjoyed reading this poem. I connected with it, and I think you've done a good job at portraying an emotion.
Thank you!
I LOVE THIS AND I AM HERE FOR YOU
I LOVE THIS AND I AM HERE FOR YOU
I think its my best yet.
Honestly me too
Overall, I think you did a very good job. Your poem hit me on a personal note, for I sometimes feel that I have no one in my life to comfort me.
I think the way you formated your lines and stanzas really made the poem flow well.
I also loved how you used bolds and italics to shape your poem. That gave it more depth.
Thank you! Welcome to YWS!
OMG!!!!!!!!!! IT'S OK!!!!!!!! I AM HERE FOR YOUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU!!!!!! Don't forget that bud. I know Grim may not help you at times, or maybe even at all, but I can help you! I promise you! You may not believe me, but that is perfectly fine, I will still help you.
*Backs away from computer*
Uh....
*Goes back to computer*
Never mind, I know you believe me, forget anything about you not believing me that I would help you.
*Pollution walks in and rolls her eyes*
Thanks Lake. I am good now.
Wonderful, cause I'm getting nervous, Pollution won't leave the room.
BEGONE FOUL BEAST! Aka Pollution.
XD She left...but she still has her eyes in the room.....
GO FLUMADIDDLE
Ummm wooo?
NO
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I LOVE YOUR POETRY
THANK YOU WE SHOULD REALLY COLLAB
LET'S
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Thanks!
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Here you guys. This is basically a mash up of all of my poems. Credit to DG for a few of the lines and some grammar fixes!