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J - Part 3 of SMSU Poetry

by DeerInBacPac


Just jumping jubilantly, 

Joyfully justifying Sully's jollifications,

Just jitterbugging with Nayleth, a jittering, jeweled scaled person,

Joyfully jabbing jamming Griffin.

Just being me. 


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Sun Nov 26, 2017 1:47 am
rosette wrote a review...



How fun!
I love the crazy words in here. They make this so jolly. <3

I've seen your SMSU poetry works hanging around and thought I'd give one a shot and review it. Unfortunately, there is a problem with that because I do not know who the people of these poems are. Sorry. Are they characters, perhaps, from a story of yours? Or am I completely wrong? :P Though... if the reader is supposed to know who the characters are, why did you describe Nayleth? Yet the others I remain clueless on.

The line "Joyfully jabbing jamming Griffin" is the only one that gave me pause. It doesn't make sense. Jamming? While jabbing? I am confusion. But hey, this jolliness is all wrapped up in the ending line: "Just being me." However. Who is "me"?

I hope this review wasn't too irritating, and I wish you the best of luck in your future works.
Happy Review Day! Goooo Team Cranberries!

~rosette




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Fri Nov 17, 2017 10:15 pm
zaminami wrote a review...



Hello Flumadiddle! Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!

Give me your soul.

With that aside, I'm not the best at poetry but here we go!

Bold = grammar and flow issues.
Italics = suggestions and overall
Strikethrough = remove
Underline = krazy Kara komments.

Spoiler! :
Just jumping jubilantly,

Joyfully justifying Sully's jollifications,

Just jitterbugging with Nayleth{ - }a jittering, jeweled{,} scaled person,

Joyfully jabbing jamming Griffin.

Just being me.


My interpretation:



Awwwwwwwww

Overall:



I loved this! This shows so much of J's character! I really hope that she becomes a badass mods I dunno other synonyms for this word so don't get mad in the future of your book :D Keep up the great work!

Why haven’t you given me your soul yet? --

Kara

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DeerInBacPac says...


pfffft. I already knew I wanted her to be a badass. But her importance... that grow.



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Fri Nov 17, 2017 7:21 pm
IzzyIsHappy says...



Hi! Izzy here for a review!

I have to take a test in like four minuets so here we go!

I really like that the poem is very upbeat, but I also know, with you, it's never upbeat.

I like this okay yup bye!

Izzy




DeerInBacPac says...


YOU KNOW TO MUCH

HISSSSSS



IzzyIsHappy says...


Don't hiss at me you snake!



DeerInBacPac says...


I AM NO SLYTHERIN



IzzyIsHappy says...


IS THAT A HARRY POTTER REFERENCE??



zaminami says...


I AM A SLYTHERIN

AND RAVENCLAW

FITE ME



DeerInBacPac says...


MY SECOND OR THIRD HOUSE IS SLYTHERIN GOSHH



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