Hello Flumadiddle! Welcome to YWS! Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!Give me your soul and congrats on featured member by the way.
With that aside, I'm not the best at poetry but here we go!
Bold = grammar and flow issues.
Italics = suggestions and overallStrikethrough = remove
Underline = krazy Kara komments.
My interpretation:
I know exactly who this poem is about, and I know it's personal, so...
Overall:
Overall, I liked, but I feel like the acrostic poetry is starting to get a bit redundant. I would experiment with other types of poetry. Take "the sounds of the fire truck sirens," for example, or poetry from @alliyah. Try that style. That would be my main suggestion
Why haven’t you given me your soul yet? --
Kara
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