Hi. This is kman134. I'm here to review your work.
It was short and simple, but it was pretty good. I can understand how you feel. sometimes, when i'm depressed, i feel like a flea or an amoeba, insignificant to something greater and just wish to fade from existence.
you remarked the with rand geographical characteristics of Oakland and San Fransisco perfectly and pointed out the entropic flaws. the stanza's were well-writtened and spaced perfectly.
the emotional tone was calm and serene and the symbolisms was a little nihilistic and depressing, but insightful in the mind of one's being. it has a very existential undertone that questions why we exist and whether or not we matter in the world.
anyway, this was pretty good. i hope you write more.
Points: 60
Reviews: 200
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