Leprosy

Leprosy

I.

After how many voyages

could a Man say he is well-traveled?

And after how many years

could a Man say he is too old?


Mankind seduces rats.


We wait, we sit on the edge,

grasping our seats until we have

become engaged to frivolous waiting

and pregnant with untamed jealousy.


We are Lepers.


We browse through our memories,

discarding the ones that make us smile

and saving the ones that don't.


We fool ourselves into believing

that we are not good enough,

that we are too old.

That we are shriveled and dry,

dust stolen away with the breeze.

And we spend the rest of our days

as Miss Havisham.


I do not think we are meant to die like this,

to wear away after endless centuries.

It is too meaningless

of an end.


II.

Spare an ear

and I will utter my words to you,

though they are too heavy

for a paper light as this.


Don't look back.


Come and play pretend with me.

Maybe we can play dolls,

with the rest of the world.

Let us make them our Barbies and

our Kens.

Let us dress them up and

tear them down,

until there is nowhere left to hide.


You turn your back on me.


You stopped playing dolls

a long time ago.

You scoff, you scorn,

you point your finger at my face and laugh.


Tighten up your wig.

Perfect your eyeliner.

And then keep prancing through

this lie Mankind calls reality.


III.

It doesn't have to be this way.


The objects that Mankind is drawn to

are only icons

waiting in our tomb.


Don't let them fool you.

Leprosy is running rampant

through the streets.


Understanding was forgotten

at the last left turn.

Wisdom got discarded

in the garbage heap

at the end of the road.


Naivety has become the fallback,

the second chance,

that I'm not so sure

we really deserve.

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sphealwithit
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Sphealwithit here, happy review day.

Firstly I'm just saying this from a scientific point of view I don't think mice give people leprosy. I do like the poem. It's just pretty confusing and your ideas feel all over the place. I suggest you read over your stuff before you post it.

The language is good. It flows well and the language is lyrical. Keep up the good work.

Sphealwithit out..

Knight Dragon, here to bestow a review upon your work on this wonderful Review Day!

Technical:
"Mankind seduces rats." How does this fit into the poem? What does it mean? It's just out there, all by itself.
I read through the entire poem, and I now get that it's supposed to stand alone, but would it be better if you'd written "We attract rats."? Then it'd transition into the next stanza more smoothly. Otherwise the transition off of impersonal narrator to plural first person would be less abrupt.

Otherwise I liked the metaphor you had, and how well you portrayed it. Good job.

Hope this helps!

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Knight Malachi for the Green Room review, as well as blue team on Review Day.
This poem was very well written, and i liked the flow of it. i don't always enjoy free-verse poetry, but this is one that i did enjoy.
Stanza two was my favorite stanza, due mostly to the fact that it had the most hopeful thoughts, and I agree with the fact that we can do more, and that we should never think we are too old, or two weary. Also, I don't know if you believe this, but i do not believe that all wisdom and so on, has been discarded. Overall good job.
Keep it up.



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