The crowd slithers between the apartments
back and around and upon the road
to and from and for their jobs
a somber lull fills their breath
they need another chance
a second, a third, a fourth and fifth.
Woolen hats and cotton coats
do little against the brisk air
the way they frown, the way they laugh
with fake joy and faker truth.
Smog rides in the sky and hides the sun
a makeshift cloud, a bird not there.
Puddles strewn beneath their boots
water droplets jump from one to the next
never ceasing to exist nor large enough to notice
though always large enough
to drown their unsaid miseries.
Stains upon the battlefield
of poverty and starvation
children huddle with clattering teeth
they try to clean the mess.
A woman threatens a stealing child
the child steals for food
skin taught, pale and extracting heat
bones protrude and eyes are sunken.
A dream inside reality
insanity is sane
for in the cold swept streets
an old man whispers to himself
“O, beautiful death, come and revive me”
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Wowowowowowowoowowowowoow! This poem is beautiful! Usually I don't like poems that dont rhyme but yours still has this musical ring to it. Awesome vivid imagery, a concept/idea that can span the ages, a haunting ending... I salute you!
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LOVE IT. I like how you described the city, and it seems like its set in or around the 1940's during the Depression. I'd give it 6 stars if I could only do 5.