Young Writers Society

Greetings @Snoik

Beyond my beloved horizon, I'm diving headfirst into some new reading material, ready for an adventure. I whip out my trusty binoculars, and what do I see? An interesting poem titled "Clothes" that definitely deserves a solid review. So, no more waiting around, let's jump right in!



I find it rather intriguing that you can create a poem with three single sentences. A few minutes ago I had no idea that this was even possible, I didn't even know what a haiku was. But I'm glad I know now, well, your poem is the reason I know it now. My fellow friend, Google, helped me find out what that exactly is.

I must say, I quite enjoyed reading a three-sentence poem, it seems so out of the ordinary. Perhaps I should just say amazingly awesome, or incredibly interesting.

The best part of your poem is probably the fact that it is relatable for most people, we all love something relatable. Things happen and it's fun to read about it.

Everything in all and all in everything, here a quick short review for your three-sentence poem which I enjoyed reading in two seconds, *Blink, Blink. Now, while lengthy reviews may dive deep, short reviews can still make a splash.

That's it, that's all.
Hoping the review has been of value to you!

With writer’s love,
Rose

Hey Snoink! I'm going to leave a super quick Checklist Challenge review for your haiku here.

This poem seems to be slightly humorous and describes the common relatable-ness of doing laundry.

I like that the "white shirt" and "black pants" are opposite from each other, and you described them as being different from each other. The person is saying that both the clothes have something not normal about them, and they are both in the laundry.

Not much to say here since this was such a short poem. But overall I enjoyed it! I hope to read more of your poems in the future!
Happy Writing!

Hello!
This...this is a work of art. A simple, bland poem where one is left with almost nothing to review on, but those three lines.
They say so little but they say so much.
The humor in this poem is subtle, but sweet. Waiting for laundry can seem to be a daunting action, which is not mentioned in this poem.
That's the great thing about short poems; they have so much mystery that they make you think. They make you think about the structure or the motive. It may mean nothing, or it may mean something huge, but it all depends on the reader's perspective.
Wonderful poem, one of the best short poems I've seen.

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Salutations, curious mind!

Happy RevMo! Gengar here to leave a review!

Hello… it’s me. Again

General Impression:

Another short & sweet poem! Is it a haiku? Sorry, I’m not good at identifying these kinds of things 😅

What I Liked:

It’s good at portraying a story in such a small amount of words. We can feel the emotion of the speaker even though they only insert their thoughts in the last line.

Areas of Improvement:

I feel ir could use punctuation, like commas after the first two lines and a period on the last (uhh I’m not sure if this kind of poem does not have punctuation)

I hope my review could be helpful. I wish you a good day/night!
—GengarIsBestBoy

The Messenger here to review for you Snoink! Happy Review Day!!!
Hehehehehe. That was funny. Sounds like stories I've heard, and siblings I have with such problems. Very funny haiku which I am starting to read more and really starting to enjoy and appreciate. You got the syllable count correct *thumbs up* and I see from to others that this is a very true haiku.
Keep it up!

I am just getting into senryu or haikus I can't very well tell the difference so sorry for that. This actually made me laugh harder than I feel I should have. I felt that it was lacking but what it lacked you made up for in humour.

White shirt is dirty
Black pants don't fit anymore
I wait for laundry

HAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHHA
MASTERPIECE!
x

Wow Snoink haha It was great =P

i realy loved it

It's perfect in every way possible!

Nice work












hehe

Hahaha, actually, it's a senryu, which is a humorous haiku! Or something like that.

Also, this is a pretty old poem! I'm going to lock it so that more people can critique to poems that actually need critiquing! But thanks for responding.

Absolute win!
It's nice to see a poem that isn't cliched.
And it's a haiku!

Just Win!

What's a senryu? O.o

Edit: Darn, sorry for replying to this. I know I didn't bump it but I forgot to check the dates.

Haha, I completely forgot about this poem.

It's actually a senryu.

Haha, awesome Snoink. This is a haiku, yes? I thought it was pretty awesome, and I laughed a little at the end. My only problem is that the lines seem a bit too forced. For instance, do we really say, "I wait for laundry"? No, we say, "I wait for the laundry." I can understand that this is a haiku and you're limited on the syllables that you can use, but don't be afraid to go digging around for a line that fits the requirement while not sounding awkward to reader.

-Elinor

Ya know, that's what happens to me! I hate it when the happens...another hour of waiting..errgh
~Skyy.

These poems are really turning out to be SOMETHING!!! My friend caught me in school yesterday reciting to my mind this one about your laundry.

YAY!!! I loves it!

*applauds*
Truly charming stuff, Snoinkers.

Exactly! I got this poem stuck in my head after a nightmare, in which I had to do Mozart's Adagio in his famous clarinet concerto. *shivers* And I had no suitable clothes!

*nods* So runs the life of a band geek... lol. Nice.

Spectacular!