Young Writers Society

The Messenger here to review for you Snoink! Happy Review Day!!!
Hehehehehe. That was funny. Sounds like stories I've heard, and siblings I have with such problems. Very funny haiku which I am starting to read more and really starting to enjoy and appreciate. You got the syllable count correct *thumbs up* and I see from to others that this is a very true haiku.
Keep it up!

I am just getting into senryu or haikus I can't very well tell the difference so sorry for that. This actually made me laugh harder than I feel I should have. I felt that it was lacking but what it lacked you made up for in humour.

White shirt is dirty
Black pants don't fit anymore
I wait for laundry

HAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHHA
MASTERPIECE!
x

Wow Snoink haha It was great =P

i realy loved it

It's perfect in every way possible!

Nice work












hehe

Hahaha, actually, it's a senryu, which is a humorous haiku! Or something like that.

Also, this is a pretty old poem! I'm going to lock it so that more people can critique to poems that actually need critiquing! But thanks for responding.

Absolute win!
It's nice to see a poem that isn't cliched.
And it's a haiku!

Just Win!

What's a senryu? O.o

Edit: Darn, sorry for replying to this. I know I didn't bump it but I forgot to check the dates.

Haha, I completely forgot about this poem.

It's actually a senryu.

Haha, awesome Snoink. This is a haiku, yes? I thought it was pretty awesome, and I laughed a little at the end. My only problem is that the lines seem a bit too forced. For instance, do we really say, "I wait for laundry"? No, we say, "I wait for the laundry." I can understand that this is a haiku and you're limited on the syllables that you can use, but don't be afraid to go digging around for a line that fits the requirement while not sounding awkward to reader.

-Elinor

Ya know, that's what happens to me! I hate it when the happens...another hour of waiting..errgh
~Skyy.

These poems are really turning out to be SOMETHING!!! My friend caught me in school yesterday reciting to my mind this one about your laundry.

YAY!!! I loves it!

*applauds*
Truly charming stuff, Snoinkers.

Exactly! I got this poem stuck in my head after a nightmare, in which I had to do Mozart's Adagio in his famous clarinet concerto. *shivers* And I had no suitable clothes!

*nods* So runs the life of a band geek... lol. Nice.

Spectacular!