One word: funny. XD
He looked at me
I stared back.
He scratched his nose
I stared back.
He rubbed his hair
I stared back.
He smiled a bit
I stared back.
He yawned and stretched
I stared back.
He ate some food
I stared back.
He choked on a hot dog
I stared back.
His face became blue
I stared back.
He gagged and convulsed
I stared back.
He fell to the floor
I stared back.
The ambulance came
I stared back.
He blinked.
...
That is my response to that poem. But then, I thought about it, and this 
became 
Hehe.
**points** What they said. LOL I loved this. I read it through - becoming slightly irritated with the staring person, I will admit -and then I got to "he blinked" and I sat there and blinked myself, LOL. Very clever and unexpected. I like the rhythm too (must say SOMETHING critique-ish hehe), very catchy. And that ending took me completely by surprise. 
=D> =D> =D> \:D/ :thumb:
OMG, I love this, it doesn't hold the same kind of senseless, soul searching depth as most, it's more thinking, struck silence, and then hysterical laughter. I thought it was very clever, and although the repetition became tiresome after a little while, in the end it all worked because the end caught you off guard, excellent work!
I deny everything.
Actually, I don't deny giving Snoink inspiration.
Now that I think about it, she did write it on my computer...
Nah, I still deny it.
Laugh all you want! I was in tears while doing this improvised poem (Griffinkeeper inspired it).
*blinks* wow... I... was not expecting that. *is unsure whether to laugh or just continue blinking*
I don't know what you were aiming for, but you certainly got a reaction out of the reader. Good job there...
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