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Freely Falling Object

by Snoink


Freely Falling Object
Falling straight into my head
Means I've spent too much time with physics
And it's time to go to bed.

Dedicated to my sister. :)


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Mon Dec 19, 2005 10:07 pm
Boni_Bee says...



Lol, this was good! At first I thought it would be a bit more serious, but I was smiling by the end :D




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Mon Dec 19, 2005 9:08 am
Snoink says...



You're on!

I hope you're writing your piece now... bwhahaha...




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Fri Dec 16, 2005 7:07 pm
Firestarter says...



I think we should have a pact - you should write more meaningful poetry, I should write more prose.




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Fri Dec 16, 2005 5:47 pm
Snoink says...



*closes ears* Nyah, nyah, not listening!

Nah, just kidding. I like... random poetry. I've always been a fan of Shel Silverstein, Jack Prelutsky, and more, and I love the creativeness of children's songs. Have you ever heard Greenday play something as original as "Bananaphone?" I think not! And I have written serious poetry. Bluebird's an example. But I like prose as a medium for seriousness better, just because I have a greater handle on it better. :)




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Fri Dec 16, 2005 5:43 pm
Firestarter says...



Hah, great rhythm.

Now if only I could convince you to write more meaningful poetry, we'd be on to something ...




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Fri Dec 16, 2005 5:40 pm
Snoink says...



Yeah, you're right about the second to last line. It just... came out that way, if that makes sense.

And it was physics because my sister was freaking out about the physics formulas that she would have used for her final. She began saying, "Freely falling object..."

Then Dad interrupted with, "It's time to go to bed!"

So yeah. I love randomly inspired poetry! :)




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Fri Dec 16, 2005 2:46 pm
Jennafina says...



Um... Nice.

I think you have too many sylables in the second to last line, though.


But I'm with you on the too much physics thing. It is 5:50 AM here and I'm cramming, lol.




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Fri Dec 16, 2005 11:47 am
ladydark says...



cute ^-^ I like it, goood job :lol:




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Fri Dec 16, 2005 10:44 am
Jojo says...



Nice and short by The Almighty Swine. :) Why did you choose Physics? Goes to show you really have spent more than enough time with Physics.





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