Young Writers Society

Hello again my writing friend! It's me IcyFlamyPhoneix. Anyway I just popped in the leave a review before I move onto the next chapter.

Okay let's start.

So I wasn't expecting the story to take such a turn. I thought Tiana would have been pouncing on Ala every change she gets so she leaving her alone was a really shocker to me. But I was also a very big relief.
Though I wonder what has happened to Henry to have him not come to school, I guess he could have gotten sick, or seeing family maybe. But I can't help my mind thinking of the worst things that can happen, because me being a writer like you I no you like to spring surprises on us readers. So I was wondering if his mom and dad may have moved him into another school because there is to much trouble at the school his at now? I no that's not going to happen...maybe, but I can't help but think it.
Anyway I was nice to see Ala make a new friend, I am rather shocked Tiana's little sister is so gentle. Jenny seems very sweet and she and Ala could really become close friends, but I'm sure Tiana will come between them because Tiana is her sister, but with your story you can never no, your always changing things. XD

So the ending to this chapter freaked me out a little because I have a feeling something really bad is about to happen, and I have no idea what!!!! O_O So I will be going to the next chapter right away. I hope you keep writing and post again soon. Have an amazing day or night either one.

Your friend and faithful reader
FlamingPhoenix.
Reviewing with a fiery passion!!

I'm happy that Ala found a friend in Jenny. But why must your chapters always end on a sad note? It terrifies me and makes me worry about what's to come! Very realistic to have Tiana's sister become Ala's new friend. Often if the main villain of a story is nasty, their siblings also don't like them very much and alliance themselves to their enemies in hopes to vanquish them. (Forgive my old english - I was reading a essay on Shakespeare) Farewell my friend and keep writing!
-Shieldmaiden

Ala is a SEEKER!!!Her dreams turn to reality Oh gawd!!That grl's gonna do great things.I am sure of it!!
Also i am concerned about myself now, a pre schooler loves My Little Pony whereas i am obsessed with it.Does that make me loco.A pre schooler plays pretend games and i....I should probably stop here*awkward laughter*

People shut them out, pushed them away, treated them like trash.

Some were kind, but fear kept them from reaching toward them.

Me and Henry have each other,

I've always wanted to play My Little Pony."

But of course, it couldn't last long.

peace out

Heeeyooo Horisun!

Hope you are doing well today or tonight, depending on what side of the world you are on, obviously. I'm here to give you a review! Also, I'm on my mum's phone, and the keyboard is extremely annoying. All phone keyboards are extremely annoying so whatever. If there's stupid spelling mistakes, don't look at me, look at the keyboard.

Alright. I see what you have here. Interesting. Hmm. Interesting indeed. What if Jenny joins Ala and Henry and they all become besties and then they're all like this mini army who fight Butt (Tiana) and her followers? Like, that'd be the cutest thing ever! *squeal*

Me and Henry have each other, and together, we can stand up to Tiana and her band of meanie pants.

Henry was absent, (Again) and Ala busied herself by thinking about her new favorite show, My Little Pony.

Ala whirled around, and for a moment, she thought it was Tiana, but she let out a long sigh of a relief when she realized it was just Tianas sister, Jenny.

Ala instantly brightened. "Of Course I don't mind. What do you want to play?"

But of course, it couldn't last long.