WELL HELLO
Hope you're doing well! <3 I'm so glad I get to see Ala again, but with a fresher version, and an,, older,, Horisun? I don't know how to say it, but I'm happy I get to go through Ala's story again. I still remember the last chapter of the first draft and eek that makes me so happy hehe ^^'' I'm excited to see what changes/edits there's going to be in the new chapters! I wonder if I can recall scenes from the first draft? hmm
Ah! She needed to add some clouds! That was it.
aww I love how this is so cute and innocent xD
But alas, the path to victory is never clear, and before her stands her Arch Nemesis, Tiana.
yes!!! I remember Tiana!! The Evil Gremlin xD
“Wait, never mind, since they are coming from your mouth, they probably mean something stupid.”
THAT COMEBACK LOL but also so innocent omg she doesn't even know what it means xD It seems pretty weird though, for a five year old to know words like that @_@ who am I to judge though, Tiana's probably smart!!
Not like she had anything better to do anyway.
#LifeAsAPreschooler
Henry was his name, she thought.
Ahhh it's HENRY <3 <3
“My Little Pony!” She exclaimed.
Maybe Preschool wouldn’t be so bad, now that she had a friend.
those innocent days when you would exchange two kind words with someone and they'd automatically be your bestie for restie 🥺
Of course, it wasn’t long before Tiana and her gang of Girls picked up the whiffs of happiness.
gang of Girls - caps? spicyyy
That ending is so dramatic and I can't help but giggle, because imagining five-year-olds (maybe even four-year-olds) being all sassy like that is the most adorable thing and just ahh it's killing me xD
The pacing was decent in the beginning but after that, I feel like it started to get a bit rushed. One second Ala was done making her drawing, the next second poof Henry's her new friend! In my opinion, there's two reasons for this: a) there's not much description in the chapter, y'know? Like, probably show us Ala's expressions, Tiana's expressions, how does Henry look like? Is the teacher old? Young? Stuff like that, y'know? b) The chapter is pretty short. It's people's own choice to keep their chapter shorter or longer, this is just a personal opinion, and you can choose to ignore it if you'd like! <3
Anyway, that's pretty much it for this review! Hope it helped! ^^ Lemme know if you have any questions regarding this. c: I'll try my best to get to the next chapter soon, probably tomorrow. :')
Wishing you a singing, dancing good time <3
~Lib
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