February... February... Fourteen... Fourteen...
"I got it!" Ala cried, sitting up from her seat. Henry and Jenny looked at her hopefully, listening to what she had to say. "I bet-" She leaned in, and began to whisper. "That it's a secret code..."
"To what?" Jenny asked.
Ala slid back into her seat, and thought, but Henry interrupted her. "Perhaps it's really a message!" He grabbed Alas hand and pulled her to the ABC's chart. Jenny followed closely behind. "Februarys the- the-"
"Second month?" Jenny asked.
"Yeah!" Henry said, "So, 2, 14, 19!" He started counting the letters, "B- N- T- What does that say?"
"Buh-Nnnn-Tuh?" Ala sounded out.
"Perhaps you did it wrong?" Jenny asked, going up to check.
"I still think it's a secret code."
"A secret code to what?"
Ala spun around, locking eyes with the unwelcome sight of Tiana.
"What do you want Tiana?" Henry demanded.
Tiana grinned at him, "Don't worry, I come in peace, I just want to speak with him." Ala stepped in front of Henry.
Ala felt Henry touch her shoulder, as he walked past. "I'll be alright." He reassured her, as he walked away with Tiana.
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Hello! Can you believe it's me again here with yet another review like always.
Okay let begin! *rubs hands together and begins to type*
So like always I couldn't find anything wrong with this story other than you could as some description into it, add some detail into this wonderful story you have here. It will add so much more to what you have set up so well. But it you don't want to never mind that then.
Now I want to talk about this chapter.
So it just took another interesting turn, apparently they think February Fourteen in a code? I'm not to sure about that, but they are kids after all so anything in their minds in possible, and you are the writer of this story so you can do what ever you want.
It is nice that jenny, Henry and Ala are becoming really close friends. It just means Jenny doesn't go along with what ever her sister wants her to do.
Talking of Tiana what is up with her just walking over and demanding to talks with Henry, are those to friends? But he hasn't told Ala yet. I'm not sure but I'm getting really curious about what will happen next, and why did Henry go along with Tiana?
Gah So many things are happening and I don't have the answers for them, it is driving me insane, but I no you will give them to us later on when you think it is time, we as the reader just have to keep reading and wait and see.
Anyway I loved this chapter, it took a really good turn and it has got me thinking about a few things. So I hope you will keep writing and post again on YWS soon. Have an amazing day or night either one.
Your friend and faithful reader
FlamingPhoenix.
Reviewing with a fiery passion.
So, Henry didn't really become the enemy as I thought. The chapter's title led me to think that he would abandon Ala. Perhaps he isn't coming back. Nevertheless, I'm glad that you are keeping him a pawn in this game of Tiana's and that he remains a good friend to Ala. Keep writing!
-Shieldmaiden
Hey Horisun!
So I am here. I read this. I read the seventh chapter first though. So, hope you're doing well today or tonight, depending on what side of the world you're on, obviously. I'm here to give you a review. Let's get started now shall we.
Okay, short chapter, but that's okay. Also, what's with the February fourteen thing in the beginning? Like, yeah, it could be teh secret code, but who's saying it? Like is it some recorder, someone whispering it, etc. You might wanna make that clear.
February needs to have the apostrophe before the "s". Also, him stuttering is the cutest thing ever.
UGH. I knew it was gonna be her. Tiana
Yeah right. You're probably gonna mess something up right now. *sticks out tongue*
Okay, adorable chapter - as usual - and I love it.
I can't wait to see what this secret code thing is and I also cannot wait to see what Tiana's gonna do with Henry. Is she gonna tell him something about the secret code? Is she gonna tell him some lies about Ala? Whaaaaaat is it???
Right, so that's it for my review. Hope this helped in one way or the other. I can't wait to read the next chapter! Of course, if you've got any questions, feel free to ask.
Keep on writing!
~Liberty
Whhaattt!! That was super abrupt. You just jumped straight into the next day without any account of other events taking place in between. That disrupted the flow a bit.
And what Secret Code guysss??? I wanna know right now!!
Take in consideration i am ignoring the fact that its soooooooooooooooooooooooo veeerryyyyyy short. Whyyy??
I do realize that you post short chaps so it will be easier to review for some other people
I disagreeBut thats a lot. Ok so yeah i didn't ignore the Fact *shrugs*
Thanks for the review! Did you read chapter seven? Idk, just checking, I was thinking that's why it was abrupt, but you do make a point, it is abrupt either way, maybe?
PS: I think you skipped the seventh chapter. %u2764%u2764%u2764%u2764
Also, it's not abrupt when you read the 7th chapter. I think it's perfectly fine.
And here comes my review...
I did read the chap 7
which should be clear since i liked it. I still thought this chap was abrupt but ofcourse people have different opinionsIn that chap you ended with Ala, jenny and butthead getting punishment. After that in this chap you straight up started with the secret code with many questions left unanswered like How did Jenny and Henry became friends? What bout Jenny's friend?
I do recall this February 14th sth Ala saw on her way to school the one in which she told her father to giddy up. But you jumped straight into the code. The tiltle of this chap was unset too since Ala and Henry are still friends and they even have Jenny now. So yeah Get my point???.
Ofcourse i don't mean any of this in an offensive way or so cuz I am by all means Ala's biggest fan.
Yeah, that makes sense... I actually noticed that while I was working on the next chapter.
WHY AM I THE ONLY ONE WHO THINKS IT'S PERFECTLY FINE???/