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What a goofy little piece. I loved it so much. April is so fun! I always thought May would be a little more pleasant of a month. She needs to lighten up a bit!
The twist on the end actually left me intrigued. I was just enjoying myself with a fun little personification of the calendar months, and then April admitted this one was not a prank and now I'm like... wait what why WHY IS IT OVER??
It would be fun to get a better feel for the office environment that they were in to help picture the chase after April and the destination they were actually intended for in the first place (the "meeting place" which is an extremely vague phrase in and of itself). One could argue that it's not important, but the way this piece reads as a narrative following the actions of the characters, a third-person view if you will, I think fleshing out the setting will help a bit. You can tell a lot of the story simply through small bits of description!
That leads into the idea of perhaps a stronger beginning. The hook itself was actually pretty good. I wish I knew why the other months gave her a headache. By the end, I only know why April gave her a headache. But again, perhaps I'm asking too much of a simple narrative!
I like the story though. It made me smile for sure. April is such a goofball. Poor December. We didn't really get to know the guy much at all, so I didn't really get attached to him (in fact, I don't think he had much of a role in the story itself) but just being swept up in another April venture was a completely relatable experience. XD
Keep writing!
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