Young Writers Society

Heyo its SkyJayde! I'm here to leave a review!

First off, what grabbed my attention was the title "Stuck" it made me think, how are you stuck? emotionally? mentally? maybe even physically? It gave a sense of that someone was struggling and needed help in a way or just to get their feelings out and what better way than to write an amazing poem!

Secondly, I was curious about how your description of this poem was about becoming selfish. Because how I see it, is that you're not being selfish at all, you're putting yourself first and to be honest that's something I've struggled with so to listen to someone who is struggling BECAUSE they put themselves first is very interesting to me. I can understand and relate to a few lines which made this poem even more connecting for me personally. It always helps that when you're reading something you can at least connect with the author in some way. So, you did a great job at creating a connection with your readers!

Thirdly, let's discuss some lines!

"You are amazing, kind, strong, passionate, smart,

With eyes that are constantly filled with love.

You won't give up on me and I hate you for it. "

These lines hit deep. I love how you described this person as kind, strong, smart, passionate and with loving eyes. It almost gave like a sense of hope that maybe there was something even if its little but at least a spark between you. I do relate to the last line "You won't give up on me and I hate you for it" because it's easier to hate someone because they won't leave you alone or just leave. I found this out because even though it's hard to realize, it does get hard to accept someone else's help and the fact that when you're struggling they struggle too because they just want to help but, as every humans finds it easier too, pushing them away just seems easier even though they're really there to help you.

Next lines!

"I want to look at you and drown in your eyes,

I want to feel an overwhelming, fiery passion for you,

I want to daydream and dream about you,

I want to be overcome with desire for you.

But I'm not."

These lines really show that you really want to be all in for this relationship but you're finding it hard to feel things. It's telling the reader that you want to feel but there's something stopping you from feeling this. What is it? Guilt? Fear? Maybe something a little more personal? Whatever it is, its keeping you from being all in. I know it may be scary but sometimes we need to face whatever is troubling us and either seek help to figure it out or sort through it yourself, whatever you feel comfortable with would help!

Overall, this poem is very enlightening and has a personal spin to it which is crucial when trying to connect with the readers. I enjoyed reading this from beginning to end and I am left wanting to know more. I can't wait to read more from you!
☁SkyJayde☁

Hey there, FireSpy Girl! I'm Wist and I just wanted to share my thoughts on this piece.

The raw and honest emotions expressed here really hit close to home. It dives deep into the complexities of love, self-reflection, and the fear of being stuck in a relationship. The internal struggle portrayed is incredibly relatable, and the writing style is captivating. Overall, a thought-provoking and emotionally charged piece that leaves a lasting impression. With that said, let's dive into some lines

Does this make me the enemy?
The toxic, narcissistic, manipulative one?

I finally learned to love myself, 
To focus on myself,
Maybe I've gone to far,

Awww this one has a lot of passion behind it. I like the use of repetition with the "I want, I want, I want". It really shows how desperate the narrator is to be "unstuck". I really like this poem and can relate to some of it. I see it, being stuck in a relationship one doesn't want.

I love this poem. You convey emotion extremely well, and the words flow into each other. Due to the first two lines, I'm guessing there have been prequels to this poem, which I probably ought to read. Overall, I think this was a lovely poem.