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Our dreams

by FireSpyGirl


We all have dreams,

We all lie awake at night,

Our heads are filled with 

The brightest colors. 

We think of what

Our world could be,

We have visions. 

People may call us crazy,

I for one, don't care.

We can make our dreams,

Our visions, our wishes

And hopes come true. 

It will take strength,

Courage and work,

We can do it. 

Don't let go,

Don't give up.


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Thu Dec 20, 2018 2:24 pm
fatherfig says...



This poem is the most encouraging piece I have read in a while.




fatherfig says...


Thank you



FireSpyGirl says...


:)



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Thu Dec 20, 2018 6:30 am
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Luke14 wrote a review...



This is a very positive outlook on life. I constantly am doubting my plans, and dream. But the poet is correct, do not give up. If you truelly believe your dreams are your destiny, do not give them up for something easier. Take the risks, and go for your dreams, if enough effort is put into them, they can happen. The poem is a little simplistic, which is a nitpik, and I don't think this harms the poem in any way. I rate this, a 9/10.




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Lib wrote a review...



Well done, FireSpyGirl!

You have officially succeeded!!! :)

I love how you fit so many big words into so many little words! I absoloutley, positively love it! All that emotion made tears well up into my eyes!

My top most favorite part is... Let me think... THE ENTIRE POEM!! :)

You have def succeeded with your poem!!!

I hope it's okay if I show this to my parents! They'd be like: "You should publish poems like this, too!"

Oh and one more thing, the last part: "don't give up." Since you had all the other beginning 'sentences' capitalized, I thought you may have forgotten to do it, maybe. Or, maybe, you wanted to leave it like that, I don't know. I'm just pointing it out!

Keep on writing!

~Liberty500




Lib says...


I just showed it to my mom. This is how it went:
Mom: Is this yours?
Me: No
Mom: What?
Me: I said no
Mom: It's really good
Me: Agreed



FireSpyGirl says...


Thank you so much!! I'm glad your parents enjoyed it as well!




We shall not cease from exploration, and the end of all our exploring will be to arrive where we started and know the place for the first time.
— T.S. Eliot