Young Writers Society

This perfectly fits the term, stuck in a rut. You try to craw out of it, but you just fall back down into it. You try again and again, for a long time. And to no avail. Some who are waiting for you to crawl out, end up giving up. And walking away. But the people who never stop waiting, those who are paitient, truely love you. But after every failed attempt, everything that caused you to fail, this takes a toll. And eventually, you reach a breaking point. Eventually, you know exactly what caused you to fail all those times. And you may not know at first, but soon you might learn how to solve that problem. How to overcome that obsticle. Overtime, you get closer and closer to getting out of the rut. You pay attention to your every move, you know exactly what's making you fail, and you illiminate those inconveniences. And one day, you might just stagger your way out of the rut, and when you do, hug the first person you can. For they, never left. And if you get out because one of those people reached a hand down, to pull you up, you will know you mean something to this person. And that's everything. If I ever saw anyone in a rut, I would never leave. Because to leave would be cruel. Because I know what it's like to be left behind. Because right now, i'm stuck in a rut. 10/10

First of all, I would like to know why you feel like this is you. I think a lot of people sometimes question why they can't be better, but there is no sense in beating yourself up over things like a GPA, or grades, or anything so shallow. I am not in any way saying your writing is shallow. I loved your piece, however, I just don't think if you truly think of your life this way that you are correct. This, as a writing piece, however was really good. I think the part that spoke to me the most was the line you wrote "The harder I try, the worse I become." I can totally relate to that, and really this piece as a whole. I hope you understand everything I am trying to say, and know I am trying not to be so hard on you! If you have not already, I encourage you to go to the Green Room and read my poem titled "hurt" and please leave a review or a comment. I would love to hear what you have to say about it. Thank you for your beautiful piece of art! I enjoyed it a lot!

This Is a very good poem. I wouldn't be so hard on yourself though. I know I can do better than what I am right now. I have a 1.5 gpa and only three b's and one a

Your poem really relates to a lot of issues that we face in this day and age. Never being happy with who we are. It speaks to the reader. My emotions fluctuated when I read your work. It is a great poem that I enjoyed reading

Definitely speaks to the heart. There is nothing here that I see needing revision; these kinds of poems usually don't need revision because you can't really put edits to something that's uniquely personal to the author. This poem was so convincing that I even considered writing down optimistic words of wisdom in my review to help you feel better! Reading this, I'm just like, "Oh dang, this person needs a hug."

Man, this is a very relatable subject matter! I can see you definitely put a lot of emotion and thought into this poem, which often results in the best poetry. Throughout the poem you talk about this perfect self that everybody else wants you to be, and I have to say you're right in the fact that those other people are wrong. You're an amazing poet, I loved this thoughtful poem and I'm definitely going to look through some of your other works!
Best of luck!