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by Bellarke

Published March 8, 2019

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In Depressing Poems

One word

that makes my heart stop.

Two syllables
that make my heart go crazy.

A name
that brings a smile to my face.

A laugh
that makes me want to keep you for myself.

A smile
that makes me want to capture every moment.

The only person
that I want to love.

You hold
the key to my heart in your hand.

I am
a whole human again with you.

You fixed
my broken pieces.

You are
my love.

Comments & reviews · 4
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Anma
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Anma wrote a review Review · Mar 8, 2019

Hello Bellaire

Another great poem, its wonderful. I can practically feel the emotion in this poem.

All the love and hope, happiness
Its a great feeling to be in love with someone💕

I like the topic of the poem. Its very creative but also captures the readers attention.
It has a very important setting and meaning, I feel.

There doesn't seem to be any spelling errors, or any capitalization issues. This is a perfect poem in my opinion, and also one of my favorites.

I hope to read more of your work!!

Your friend Anma

WritingPrincess wrote a review Review · Mar 8, 2019

Hi it’s Princess here to review a poem that’s so good I don’t even know how to review it.
I love this poem so much - it’s just so amazing!

I do have one very tiny comment though...
“The only person
that I want to love.”
In every other section the first line is two words, but this is three. I think this breaks the flow of the poem. Obviously it’s up to you to decide, though.

Aside from that I absolutely love the entire poem! Keep up the amazing work!

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OofOof1
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OofOof1 wrote a review Review · Mar 8, 2019

This is a mind-blowing poem that I can't write better. I really like how you use those short little two lines as their stanzas because that's really creative.

What I notice is that only one of your lines had a comma before the second line, I think you should either remove that comma or put all commas in the poem.

Besides that there is no other feedback I can give you, because this seems to be well structured and has a great flow. Great job.

Thank you!! :)

OofOof1 replied · Mar 8, 2019

Don't mention it. %uD83D%uDE01%uD83D%uDE01

told you it wasn't bad...

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GigiNicole17
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GigiNicole17 commented Comment · Mar 8, 2019

Bell,

THIS IS JAW DROPPING. I LOVED IT!!!

<3

Nothing would be changed, it's perfect. I'm legit speechless..



If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.
— Emily Dickinson