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Suffocating

by Bellarke


I am such a fool

to think that my heart would let me free.

Feeling like I am at the bottom of a pool,

the darkness is suffocating me.

I try to claw my way out

only to fall back to the bottom.

I look at the people all around

screaming for 'em.

But the darkness is too much,

making me disappear.

Sadness has me in its clutch,

making my future even more unclear.


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Fri Jan 11, 2019 6:35 pm
PoTatOe001 wrote a review...



Hey, Bellarke!!! 'Tato here for a review... By the way, hello!!! Haven't heard from you in so long! Okay, time for the review. Anyways, first I want to say, I love the line that says "sadness has me in its clutch, making my future even more unclear." I know what you are going through, and I know that depression sucks. If you need any help, please feel free to pm me and I will be here to listen to you. In the meantime, I have a potato joke for you. "What do you call a baby potato?" When you want to smile, don't think spud... Think tater tot!!! Anyways, great job on this writing piece. I love it! And I hope to read more soon. Have a great day! And happy writings.




Bellarke says...


Thank you. (I smiled before i even read this part..."When you want to smile, don't think spud... ")




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