Hello Bellaire
This is a very nice poem, it is strong and terrific.
I can tell you put alot of emotion, and time into it. I can almost picture the girl in the corner all alone. I almost cried, the poem touched my heart. I don't really see grammar or spelling mistakes but I think you should put spaces between paragraphs. That's only if you wish to though. I could tell when you were righting this you put your own feelings into it( winch I'm not saying its a good thing to be sad) but It helped the poem be better than it would have been.
I hope to read more of your poems
And also hope that you'll right a happy one, at least try!😁
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