I used to call you a cancer,
coming close to me,
and taking over my senses.
That was all fun and play,
Just playing, just fun banter.
But i didn't know that there would be a day,
when you actually get cancer.
Then, you showed up,
and took away my imaginary throne.
And now when your gone,
my heart feels like it is made of glass, breaking.
All I wanted was to stay in our imaginary land,
And to stay with you forever.
But now I have to face reality,
and let you go,
so that you can be happy,
with your brother, and grandfather.
Even though it hurts to say,
I am going to move on,
and live a happy life,
but you will always be with me.
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hii @Bellarke, god bless you and stay happy always. i pay you are fine and always be fine.....
this is very emotional and strong.it made me feel like i am suffering. great work ...its perfect..keep writing and stay bless dear friend...
Thank you so much!!
Take care of yourself... Have a great day.
ahh bb *hugs* i love you so much and just remember that im always here if you wanna skip class to talk or something
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I thought this was perfectly written, bellarke. it made me cry though and for that i will kersnatch your weave but it was good. like, really good.
i don't think you need to fix anything because i didn't see any mistakes and it is just ahsdiuwjkdfnc
this poem is filled with so much raw emotion and if i didn't know the story behind this poem then i think even then i would understand it quite well.
i know that you love her bb and i can't say that she is going to be okay because we both know she isn't going to be since she is already so far but i think you should know that she does love you very much. someday everything is going to change and i cant say you will forget about her because you wont, but you will be happy. it may take a while but you will get there.
I love you <3
-Jade
I love you, too, B. AND I DONT HAVE A WEAVE!! I just showed you that you have a heart. Lol.
Thank you so much...I honestly thought this sucked sooo bad.
It doesn't, trust me. You expressed your emotions (I feel your pain). That was what I liked best.
Thank you so much
No probs
A very powerful poem. This poem draws on the readers emotions. I don't think there is anything to improve upon, it's perfect the way it is.
Great job!
I am sorry for your ex.
Thank you so much
Hello Bellarke
Omg, first of all I'm so sorry to hear that.
Second of all its wonderful, I almost cried reading it.
I hope your okay, but the fact you wrote this when its based on your life makes it so real. There is so much emotion, i feel like im actually you and i am the one in this situation.
Also you just gave me a great idea for a poem, Thank You
Either than that i dont think i can say anything, it left me speechless.....
There is no grammar mistakes from what i can see.
Hello Bellarke
Omg, first of all I'm so sorry to hear that.
Second of all its wonderful, I almost cried reading it.
I hope your okay, but the fact you wrote this when its based on your life makes it so real. There is so much emotion, i feel like im actually you and i am the one in this situation.
Also you just gave me a great idea for a poem, Thank You
Either than that i dont think i can say anything, it left me speechless.....
There is no grammar mistakes from what i can see.
That was very moving.