Abused

Heeey, nice. Although the wording is on the edge of deliberation, I like it, it gets the message I beleive you were trying to communicate across. I can definitely understand where this came from, how broken you can become from a fake relationship, how idiotic you can feel from being played by someone you trust. Ineed, it lies in reality, and it happens to the best of us. You just have to keep searching, you will definitely find someone authentic, and someone who will stay true until the end. Keep writing, and I will enjoy keeping on reading. :3

Okay, I know I've already commented on this, but I will try to write a review. I'm trying to clean up the Green Room a little bit. .

On this line:
"But I hide it under my shirt." I would get rid of the word "but." I just feel like it would flow smoother, but that is just me.

On another line I would get rid of "because." It just doesn't fit all that well into the rhythm you have going.

That was all!

Wow you should continue to write more poems because i see real potential.

wow, this isn't a review so much as just a comment but...wow. I was touched by this and you just did a marvelous job.

This is a good poem. You did a really good job of expressing your pain, your thoughts. I also like how this poem is soooo very relatable, at least for me. Hang in there girl! Things will get better at some point, I promise!
Your friend,
FireSpyGirl.