When the darkness blinded me,
you were there to help me see.
When my spirit fell,
you promised not to tell.
When the evil told me I was nothing,
you made me into something.
When I fell down,
you were there to help me get up and around.
When I gave up,
You were there to pick me up.
I didnt get here on my own,
you are the only reason that I am here.
You told me that you "L" me.
And now you say you have to leave.
But all that matters is that you were there
but now your not.
So what do I do now with you gone?
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b. you better tell me what you mean. pm me you fricken loser.
Nien.
hey there here for review ,
Such heart touching poem , It made me to wish to have such lover in my life .
It is short and sweet poem. I quite fell romantic .
the title is matching with poem content .
How to improve it.
You can add your pain like how you felt when she had gone. like how darkness was surrounded to you Inspite of you having vision.
In this line you can add "Me" in the end. It will sound and rhyme too
You told me that you "L" me.
And now you say you have to leave me
Otherwise i felt quite attached.
Nothing to change
Love you dear .Take care .Have a nice day .
b. you better tell me what you mean. pm me you fricken loser.
No.
Hey there, @Bellarke, 'Tato here for a review
I'm honored you took my suggestion and wrote a poem about your girlfriend. The people in this life that give us love are the true people who should be celebrated on V-day, even if they aren't your significant other. I am also very, Very, VERY touched by the way you wrote about her impact on your life. Right now, I'm listening to "What Hurts the Most," by the Rascal Flatts. I thought it was the perfect song, in regards to the very last line where you wrote, "So what do I do now with you gone?" I don't know what you mean by that (and you don't have to tell me if you don't want to), but either way, your writing was beautiful. As usual, I am here for you, so let me know what I can do. Much love this Valentine's day!!! Hope it treats you well!! Happy Writings!! 'Tato Out.
Thanks!
okay, First off, I AM LEGIT CRYING RIGHT NOW!!!!
THAT WAS AMAZING!!!!! You are such a great person!!!! I love that you're praising her. Girls really need to hear that they are appreciated. now, that last line hurt my heart!!!! What do you mean(you don't have to tell me if you don't want to; I'm just really nosy, especially on cliffhangers like this...sorry)
If you ever need any advice, or need anyone to just talk to, just PM me and I'll be there.
~Giginicole
Thank you! And I will PM you, and tell you what I mean!
