Hey Bellarke!
This is a fairly decent poem, I like the slight rhyme scheme, and then the story interweaved in it that had a bit of depth.
I understood the meaning to be that the speaker is feeling very hurt by this girl, and is reflecting all the ways the girl wronged her - by hurting her. The speaker even feels like taking revenge on this girl, and hopes to eventually find love. It's an interesting concept mainly in that I don't see a lot of revenge themed poetry - or even that much poetry that tackles the anger side of the end of relationships, so I liked that you weren't afraid to dig into that.
I have a few critiques and suggestions!
Formatting
The poem would look cleaner if you didn't have a space between the first and second line. I also thought the opening line was rather generic compared to the rest of the poem (your second poem was much stronger). I didn't care much for the "ellipses" at the end (...) because it seemed to be without meaning, so again just served to make the poem look less clean.
Emotional Content
I think your poem would be stronger if you strayed away from sort of generic emotion words like "hurt" and "sadness" and "true feelings" - or at least tried to limit them, because they end up not saying all that much, or really digging into the emotional layers - if you could find a more specific word or a metaphor to express some of them it'd make the poem stronger.
Flow
Overall I thought the light rhyming and assonance approved the poem's I think this line did not work for phrasing or flow though "Hidden under all the fake smiles, and "I am fines,""
To be grammatically correct I think it'd be "I am fine"s -- but it's just honestly a bit awkward. If there's anyway to change it so that 'fines' isn't plural I think it'd help out the readability of that stanza.
That's all I had! Nice work here! I look forward to reading another one of your poems soon.
~alliyah
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