The Wind blew down the mountain-side
Soaring past the troubles of the world
Blowing cherry blossoms about the town,
Up and down it twisted and twirled.
But died down when by the trees it passed
Careful not to disturb the sleeping bird.
Then gushed through the chimney sweep
So by the sweet family it was heard.
It broke the silence of Earth's tranquility,
And rang in the worried peoples' ears.
Then in a silent yet comforting whisper,
"God is with you throughout the years."
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Hi. this is kman134. i'm here to review your work.
you have painted a very serene of the landscape. your emphasis on nature was very peaceful and transparent. it was like watching a Hayao Miyazaki movie. my favorite one that reminded me of this was Princess Mononoke and the Wind Rises. the emotional tone and symbolisms within was very imaginative and very joyful to read.
"God is with you throughout the years."
this part was a brilliant way to end the poem. it emphasized the use of faith within the story as it is used as a coping mechanism that every parent uses when a catastrophe like an earthquake or a hurricane sweeps the land.
i really love this poem. keep writing and i'll wait for your next story.
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Hey there! I just wanted to let you know that I love this poem it's beautiful! I think you could change around a few words to help it rhyme a bit more and to keep the flow. I also found the format interesting but it complemented your piece very nicely. The imagery is my favorite part, I could see the power of the wind and it really brings in the readers.
Hi I love this poem while I do love dark poetry, once and a while it is nice to hear a poem about nature. This poem I belive will bring joy to anybody that hears it.
I do agree with PrincessInk your main issue is the awkwardness when you cannot find the right word to make the poem rhyme. there were some things in certain sentences like
Up and down it twisted, danced, and twirled
If you took out dance this sentence would be more beautiful and not be so bulky. And
It died down when by the trees it passed
In this sentence you sacrificed sentence structure for Rhyming. Try choosing as instead so that the sentence flows.
Keep Writing!!!
Haha whats funny is when you were reviewing I took Ink's advice and change a few things. I agree with you on the rhyme scheme prob though.
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Hey there! Shey here for a review!
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You really have a knack for poetry, especially the rhythm. The rhythm was extremely well thought out, and I don't think I've read something with such perfect rhythm in a long while.
As for comments... I don't really have much negativity to comment on. For the most part, this was perfect. As I said before, rhythm was great. I will suggest using stanzas, but that's primarily because I'm a sucker for stanzas.
The rhyme scheme was okay. The problem is that it doesn't always work. Your rhymes were good in the sense that you didn't reach for some rhyming word that doesn't make sense in the context. However, I didn't feel like the rhyme was always apparent, so when it was, it seemed out of place.
Overall, great poem! I look forward to seeing more future works from you! Keep writing (that's my usual ending to a review, but it works so well when reviewing your works
-Shey
I'm glad you liked it! I'll see what I can do about the rhyme scheme. Thanks for your review and don't forget to leave a like if you enjoyed it!
I did exactly that and forgot!
I did exactly that and forgot!
Haha no problem
Hi Keepwriting, Knight Ink is here for a quick review!
It was kind of a lovely poem about the wind that brings hope. I love these types of poems that talk about nature; the ones that aren't too dark. The ending was nice as well. I'm imagining it brought hope into people's hearts.
The main issue: the rhythm and sentence structure are sacrificed for the rhyming. I see awkward spots here that need a touch more work. I'll be pointing some out:
The part after "when" sounds a bit awkward, you think? Perhaps it'd be better if you wrote it as
And
Would it be better if it was,
Also,
feels a little clunky so if "danced" was removed, there could be a stronger line and some alliteration.
My final suggestion: add some meter. It'll boost the rhythm and give for a nice read-aloud. Good rhythm can really draw the line between a polished poem and a first-draft-ish poem in my opinion. I'm not saying your poem is bad; some refining would probably make it great!
That's all I've got to say and thanks for sharing!
Yes, you are right about the abrupt stops in flow, but like I said I wrote this a long time ago so that's probably why there is that problem.
Thanks for your review 
This is a very beautiful poem. I really like the rhyming pattern because it gives the poem a nice flow. As well as this, I really love the language you used; it really makes the poem come alive! Although, you could have taken out some of the full stops to give an implicit message that the wind keeps on moving without end, but added a few more by the part about the sleeping bird, making it feel like it had to slow down a bit to not wake the bird. Overall, this is a brilliant piece of poetry.
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